Reviews for Livia: Who I am |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Whoa... It's great! Except for some excessive romanticizing of magic, this story has a great concept. You should be careful not to bring in a horde of characters, that usually crashes the story. Also, clarifying who's PoV would help it a bit too (how to make that look good in writing is another thing, and the reason I don't write in first person). wasn't it at 11 when Sarah was supposed to meet Tara, or should 11:45 be 10:45? Except for that, I can't think of anything that really wrecks the story. It runs well through my head. Keep writing! |
![]() ![]() e! I want their dresses. I love this chapter. I want Livia's friends. I want Livia to have to marry Sarah. *screeches to a halt* Did I just say that out loud? *backs out the door quietly* ... ~Blessed Be~ Es |
![]() ![]() ![]() good chapter brandybear |
![]() ![]() ![]() Whoot, tis good. Man, you did a bloody good job of describing me. I was like, yup, thats me. Damned annoying people ne? |
![]() ![]() w0! I'm gonna get laid, I'm gonna get laid *does little diddy* lol, just kidding _ ... or am I? *cackles evilly and wanders off* -Es |
![]() ![]() ![]() Whoot, and no it didnt put me to sleep! I liked it very much |
![]() ![]() ![]() we I rule! Livia's a -! *giggle* (That was a bad name, for the morons reading this. B isn't one of those previously mentioned imbeciles. She's smartfuls _) And uhm..uhm..I want pizza. -Love Es |
![]() ![]() Oh, the new mans sounds like a bishe! Whoot *whistles* anywho *nervous laugh* this was really good, poor livia though, helping Sarah while shes all beat up, but at least Ethan, the bishe *cough* came. Right? |
![]() ![]() w00t Go me, go me w00t w00t! And uh..Livia's alright too..just let me kick more ass than her, k? *Grin* -Love, teh Es |
![]() ![]() oh yeah, she knocked him cold! damn, thats gotta hurt to be moving so much and bein in pain n stuff... ouch! But good chappie!ill update tomorrow, i swear! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Gah. okay. go write now. kthxbai |
![]() ![]() ![]() ack! NO CLIFFIES! you suck lol. |
![]() ![]() ![]() GAH! its ::reads on:: im so behind! *Robyn* yougreat |
![]() ![]() ![]() Bingle Jells, writer's block smells...you get the idea. WRITE! -Es |
![]() ![]() ![]() I would murder Jack in a second, bwahahahah. I am so evil, its just hilarious. Anywho, Livia gonna get hurt? No! Evil evil evil. Me kill right? |