Reviews for Under Crumbled Starlight
godawful teen-angst poetry chapter 1 . 5/22/2004
All of your words are so...rich? I can't even single them out because I'd literally be writing the whole poem. Wistful milkfish twillight, loamy tones, inked toes...this is really really good. I love it, and the story it tells.
~lyv
Linmenel chapter 1 . 1/3/2004
Your words are beautiful, and I say 'your' because you seem to make them do what you want them to do, which is wonderful. And the mentioning of rowan trees makes me happy.
phoenixa-mechanique chapter 1 . 5/9/2003
Your description is indeed a wonder!

It's an excellent piece but you might need to work on some rhythm, the flow and the language is obviously there but perhaps the rhythm is a bit irregular.

Interesting like there - we pull at threads between us.

Very nicely put.

Do keep writing, I look forward to your next piece!

-Phoenixa.
reveileb maerdyad chapter 1 . 5/8/2003
oh. OH! this was somberly beautiful. i like this very, very much. pretty unique imagery, and you hold the reader captive all throughout. i'm mesmerized, to say the least. _;;
fallenone87 chapter 1 . 5/7/2003
woah.. nice imagery.. it gave me a very weird yet nice sense of nostalgia.. like how you would play with your best friend without knowing what time is... it's very vivid. i liked it alot.. ) keep writing! thanks for reviewing my stuff.. )
Lonestar Sweetheart chapter 1 . 5/6/2003
love the images you conjure up... i love descriptive poetry. keep writing