I like the concept alot, however the excessive comma use after every line is somewhat distracting it makes the rhythm seem awkward, but other then that I like the topic its real.

i cant exactly describe this poem
but its very nice

It's pretty good. Sort of reminds me of the song 'Concrete Angel' :P

Good job!

Oh my God... this so... haunting. And beautiful. I agree with the other reviewer. This would kick ass as a song!

Thanks for sharing this lovely, (albeit very sad!) piece of art.

I remember this. It would make a killer .

this is nice... nothing else to say... ciao

Oh that's really sad! Sweet, I like.

Great poem, but sad