Reviews for The Falling
Ckashid chapter 6 . 7/30/2004
Wow...just finished this. Idris, you jerk why can't you let old dogs lie!
Just kidding, I love the character. And your interpitation of events. Sad that this over, but hey, had fun.
Ckashid chapter 3 . 7/28/2004
oo, that's ironic. Kessalta started off with a higher status too...SO...is that a no to my earlier question?
random muse: JUST READ THE STORY!
alright, see ya in the next chapter. *waves*
Ckashid chapter 2 . 7/28/2004
*jaw drops* never before have I felt so smart and completely stupid at the same time...at least I guessed right, eh? But I can't believe I didn't know his first name! GAR!
So...does this story support the myth of Lancelot commiting adultry with Arthur's wife? (There's no way I'm even going to TRY to write her name...)
E! And you used a fool! I love fools! Have you ever read Golden Fool? Anyway, thank you for reviewing my story, you made my day.
Ckashid chapter 1 . 7/27/2004
ALRIGHT ALRIGHT! I'm reviewing, keep writing. (ignoring that this is only the first chapter I'm reviewing...)
Let's see, if you hadn't used names I would have thought it was Lancelot telling the story here. Don't know much about King Arthur...(I'm a King Hnery II and VI reader myslef). But this looks good. You can look forward to more o' my reveiws. _
Beau Coeur chapter 6 . 5/8/2004
This is still a very good story, and I seem to have the same comments as the previous review. Your language really makes it sound realistic, but the simple telling of the story makes it monotonous. It feels as if I'm just reading a story, but the goal should be for the reader to escape into another world and not be aware that they are reading a story, on a computer screen, in their house, etc.
I hope my comments are helpful and not just annoying, nitpicky and rude (lol)
~Beau Coeur
HarmonyIsarine chapter 6 . 5/5/2004
The end? Wow. It was almost confusing. You may want to clear it up a bit, but it was good. _~ Sadness that Elaine did that. ;_;
HarmonyIsarine chapter 5 . 1/28/2004
yays! _ Very good chapters, and, since you are not editing, I will not mention the specifics of the very few errors I found. _~
Write more soon!
Beau Coeur chapter 4 . 1/24/2004
Hey!
I love your story-it's a great plot line and extremely original. The way you use the language makes it sound very accurate and true, it really adds to the story. The only problem is not with the actual story, but with the way it is told. Sometimes it's confusing to tell who is talking, and having his entire history being simply talked about and told to the reader is monotonous. I think you need to change it up a bit, because it's a great story but it's being told with no action.
Just some (hopefully helpful) advice. Other than that, your descriptions are amazing and your grammer is almost perfect-so many good stories are ruined with bad grammer-yours is not one of them! Keep up the great work, I'll definately be back to read some more-keep updating!
~Beau Coeur~
aiur chapter 3 . 12/15/2003
ah, well ... what can i say i like the knights of the round table junk heh always have even when i was young and understood NOTHING of it at all. not sure i do now, even, but yeah ... good start write more!
~k8
HarmonyIsarine chapter 3 . 12/15/2003
goodness, goodness. There were some confusing sentences, but it was a good chapter. _
HarmonyIsarine chapter 2 . 11/29/2003
The beginning needs cleared up a bit, but the end of this chapter was very good. The beginning has too many 'he's and not enough specifications.
HarmonyIsarine chapter 1 . 8/11/2003
As he rounded the bend the rising dawn sun that silhouetted the sprawling hut that was his home momentarily blinded him.

Whoa, there! That's seeming kinda like a run-on. _~

'Tis a long lonely ride from Camelot!" this last as he dismounted stiffly.

This last what? I know what ya mean, but you should specify it a bit.

And now I need more to read. _ Mwah-haha! I'll just review another of your stories everytime I run out of reading material. _