Quite a good read I might say. Very well written. The horse breed of Louie, I think shall come in later chapters, during the horse races, won't it? It's just a suspicion though, nothing more. Look forward to reading your next chapter. Keep up the marvelous work.

So the morning after a night on the town. Well written, unexpected reintroduction of mother. Hints that this may be more than burning the candle at both ends. What happens when she goes out on the terrace? Interesting that Maman's first thought was bad dreams. As per usual more questions raised and tangets to follow.

This is coming along really, really good, as I have said before you really have talent. Keep the chapters coming.

I love this story! Your writing is beautiful and the words just flow so easily. A wonderful read and I can't wait for more :)

Ms Sugabunny, you have out done yourself this time, producing the longest chapter i have ever seen you write. I am disapointed that Marie did not get a good night kiss, but leave this story with more respect for Louie than i have already. Well done, however i noticed (to my amusement) that near the begining of this chapter, Marie 'lighted' the candles instead of lit them.
Twenty Obtuse Shark Hatchlings

Good to have you back, I was starting to get worried about the story. Nice touch starting with the now familiar arkward family meal. At last an escape from the house, but not a headlong rush into the action. The fuse is slowly burning, building the anticipation. Louie has moved on from the fresh faced youth we knew. Time hasn't stood still outside of the house. There is much to learn about where his change of circumstance occured. And with another trip to Paris in the offing?

i really enjoy this story, it reminds me of a different setting of the book Interview With A Vampire. It only needs to have more in depth telling of the details. But it is a great story.

I don't really see how this chapter was relevant to anything, but well done anyway. I would suggest some action soon as the story is slowing to a halt. I'm not sure exactly where you're going with it... but as long as you keep going.
T.O.S.H.

Hello, Sugabunny! Long time no review, sorry about that. _;; I've been trying to catch up in my story pile . . . slowly but surely!
Anyway, another interesting insight into Marie's family life. It sounds so hard for her, with that rebellious heart, to be the only girl in the house (no, her mother doesn't count). I did think the conversation with her tutor a little strange, but then, I know you've got an idea of what you're doing with that and I'll just have to wait and see!
Speaking of waiting, I can't wait until this illicit night out . . . LOL.
ja ne!
LoK

Oh so tantalisingly close to the reunion of Marie and Louie, a thread to keep us hanging on by. Why drag tobacco through the house when it can just be delivered around that side, unless there's more than tobacco in the box.
The dialog around that part of the chapter was a little stilted and with a couple of typos. If you're tired when you're writing take a break and come back to it. Make a quick note and edit later.
That aside the description and characterisation are as strong as ever.
Marie plays chess as well as games, a subtle touch. Look forward to the next chapter

Well, Ms Bunny, you have finally written another chapter of this story. I come bearing praise and other expensive things. Good job, I must say. This chapter was indeed comparatively longer, however, I was confused at the beginning of chapter 18 as Louie and Marie are communicating in dialogue. Was there a skip in time? I am somehwat confused.
T.O.S.H.

Wow, this really was a longer chapter! Well done! _
Just one question (rhetorical): Who is using whom in this chapter? _~
bleh, long chapter, short review. Sorry! I'm a bit dull today - but I did really enjoy this chapter.
ja ne!
LoK
P.S. Thank you for that review of my story! I applaud your patience with my early work. _~

A massive move forward, the intrigue just escalates. The maid now has a name, definitely a player. One thought if Marie uses the old books, she'll disturb the dust. She needs to get all the books cleaned, maybe as a gift to father. That will give her the scope to use any books she wants. That said the gap opens up a possibility or two. It's a great chapter, well worth the wait. Marie's thought processes are definitely maturing. Have a great new year, it's one heck of a start.

Good job, Sugar Bunny. At first, i never intended on reading your story, however, the short and simple chapters seemed to suck me in like a vaccum cleaner sucks in fluff.
Some may find the slow development of plot frustrating, however, it somehow compliments this story.
I enjoyed the character development very much as i actually liked the main, female character for the first time in a long time.
Your choice of words are lovely and your characters believable. You make a good author. However, when i arrived at chapter 17 and realised that there was no more story, i had a fit.
Please write more soon.
The Other Safe House
T.O.S.H.

*smiles* yea I am a regular reviewer cause i like your story. But what is it with Marie's dreams? And will she be able to meet with that rouge?