That is absolutely beautiful. So peaceful...

What a great use of symbolism.

~Heart of the Sword

Great! Some of the syllables are wrong though, in the second line. I forget syllables all the time, so it doesn't really matter. Maybe if you changed 'bright' to 'red hot' or something. Good job!

~ CoolBeans18s

m peace, i like that. very Eastern. only thing that's bad with it is that it's not a Haiku. Haiku goes in syllables .. 5/7/5 .. yours if 5/6/5 .. but nonetheless i like it :) kudos!