hey there! You're blowing me away. AGAIN. it's awesome, i can't really say much more than that without being redundant. :-) Keep writing, and check out my new one, a love story.

Please look at fruits of humanity. I wrote something and I hope you read it; it's important.

Great writing. Really descriptive, but not to the point where it's overdone.

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*thud* ahhe!

Wow! That was an amazing story. It left me in suspense. The ideas were brilliant. i hope u will create an ending to this story.

Nice cliffhanger. The plot thickens as they say. I'll try to check back to see if you've posted more.

Lowell

Good opening chapter. You've caught my interest. The only part that I would suggest cutting down was when Michael wakes up in the moring and goes through his grooming routine in the bathroom. There was nothing there that advanced the story forward other than showing that Mike likes to be clean. Other than that - well done!

Lowell

Hm... First of all I am confused of your review of my poem, Forest Despair. You say that it id not my writing that impressed you yet you say later that my use of repition was impressing and it was, "clever." Also you say that I wrote about the topic effortlessly. However, isn't repitition a part of writing and don't you need to have good writing to make your story flow? Oh well...my opinion.

Anyways onto your piece. It was a very good piece of work. Your use of word choice is impressive and helps to color the story. You also put a great deal of depth into the writing. In your words,"Cheers!"

Intersting with the supernatural. You write about such things and you don't belive that our spirits might be seperate entities from our bodies. Ah im not trying to force my opinions on you. Well done! Keep writing.