|Reviews for Lightening, Thunder, Wind, Rain|
| Ruana chapter 1 . 12/16/2003
i don't think its bad at all. the thing is its got feelings and anger and stuff but when you read it it's kind of quiet and gentle and soft and stuff. try writing about stuff you feel strongly about with your feelings not describing stuff (someone told me that once..!) but this would work well in a story or something. keep writing.
| Sadistic Shadow chapter 1 . 6/17/2003
Not too bad, despite what you may think of it. Only fault I could find with it is that since it was a short poem, you shouldn't have used words or phrases such as 'fury', 'dirty', and 'across the sky' more than once.
| BlueMnM chapter 1 . 5/29/2003
It's not terrible at all..But some advice? If I were you, I would take out the last line, or revise it..It kinda doesn't fit into the poem.
Well, my 2 cents is spent..good luck! :)