Reviews for Without
Teresz chapter 4 . 8/9/2003
hmm. I never nap. Once I'm awake, I'm awake. Well, interesting cahpter. Not very action filled, but still neat!
Teresz chapter 3 . 8/9/2003
you know what? if this IS a biography like story, we have a lot in common! haha. You're totally not an oddball. I always write. I sit there at all hours of the night and write poetry, journal entries..everything! Dude, i was up until 4 AM last night writing simply NOTES for "Pitch Black," one of my sories (sequal to "In the Dark") anyway, hey, insanity isn't a bad thing anyway! lol. Well, I really wanna read more,but I need to get to bed...well, actually I'm probbaly going to read that stupid summer reading book! Two weeks till school...NOO... (with a million O's)! I really need t finish that book! Oh, and nice move of concious on Jaysen's behalf! Getting the grade for work not done would screw with his concious, I know exact;y what ya meant by that! Oh, I love Cold! Awesome awesome awesome band
Teresz chapter 2 . 8/9/2003
THE EXIES ROCK! uhm..*clears throat* nice this little biography thing is very interesting. It's really funny, cause I know Randi/Ryann. I talk to her online and "In Circumspect" is like my fave story! Coinkideinky! good chapter...once more, getting to know the life of Jaysen.
Teresz chapter 1 . 8/9/2003
a night in the life of this Jaysen dude. Cliched first chapter, but cliched nicely! It's great to get tyo know your main character first thing. Is this Jaysen dude a lot like yourself? A lot of times that happens. You end up writeing characters like yourself! And the whole spiky hair thing just made me think that maybe it was even more ofa reference to yourself. AHH! I just heard this noise and then i realized that it was my cell phone ringing, but it scured me to death!
UnLvDgothFrK chapter 1 . 6/16/2003
The story would be better if there was more detail,but i thought it was awesome!It reminded me of the shit i did when i lifed in new it was kool b/c it described alot bout how someppl's lives can be like!
hola chapter 3 . 6/7/2003
hey..this story is umm...good..but it would be better if u described more when he's in classes cuz then its kinda boring when its just like 'soon enough class was over blah blah blah' there should be more description and stuff ] its good though! nice concept
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