where does it leave them i must know please conitinue id appreciate it.

Kiri

WOW. That was amazing, well written and great characters. Im definitely hoping for a sequel.

definitely interesting, and flamboyant

hehe

good stuff

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One word. Sexy. _~ *tilts head, trying to think of more constructive criticism* Nice, very nice. Like the way this is written, how you use the curl of a lip, the mirror of emotions in eyes, and a simple action to convey emotions. Now for the sequel!

Wow! Heather's friend again, and all I have to say to this is: SHIT! Man, you're good at lemon scenes. Whew. I hope you do continue on- they're a sweet couple, and the details in this thing are amazing!

~ZB

You don't think this story was spectacular? It was something! It was everything and spectacular...lol. It was a great short story. ((Wiggles eyebrows)) I'll leave you to your thing now! lol.

-GoldenTears-

another success! Ur so good!

RNL

DAMN GIRL THEY BETTER BE BACK LOL aww shit girl you know I liked that and “What?” Nathan blinked up at him, seriously confused. “I’m folding your shirt.” That was priceless I was screaming in my head FORGET THE SHIRT DUDE. you must write more _

~Heather

It was good, it truthfuly wasn't as good as shattered peices, which was so amazing, you should make it into a screenplay then get steven speilberg to direct it, then give me some of the credit! :) Is still liked it though, a bit confusing, but...um...fun nonetheless. Tata

Not spectactular? I would disagree, that was brilliant. It was a great read and I seriously hope that Nathan and Vincent 'visit' you again. And that was 'spur of the moment'? Wow. This was awesome and you should never stop writing, you are really talented.