Reviews for New Dirt
listen to what i've never said chapter 1 . 6/30/2009
I would've liked it if you had more rhymes in certain stanzas, but otherwise I love the concept and the way you chose the metaphor of new dirt for summer flowers

I especially loved this stanza:

"Untouchable you have always been

Out of my reach; beyond my ken

Do you hide yourself there, alone?

Do you carry secrets too awful to be shown?

Must I remove your walls stone by stone?"

Really, I love that last line: must i remove your walls, stone by stone?

Beautiful
McCabe chapter 1 . 1/21/2004
Huh. The title and the summary had me thinking that this was going to be a very cynical send-up. I was quite surprised by the gentle sweetness expressed here. I would dispense with the rhyming, though - "Untouchable you have always been Out of my reach; beyond my ken" was the first line that jumped out at me to feel awkward. Over all, though, very pleasing.
Caitir chapter 1 . 6/27/2003
I like that. It's very very nice.
marijke chapter 1 . 6/4/2003
It was gorgeous :) Based on anyone in particular? ;) The imagery-esp the part about diving under the water and staying suspended between life and death-moving
xerarch chapter 1 . 6/4/2003
i like this, very calming and expressive. nice job :)