Sorry, not really sure what it is I want to say at this point. I feel(?) invested in the plot but it seems to me most the set-up being laid out without advancement in action if that makes any sense. To be fair, mystery and suspense lead me out of my comfort zone. I also tend to plot line graphs, as when playing a video game, the enjoyment of the game curve vs. the challenge/skill curve and how close they are in relation to each other.

Miiiiicaaahhh es soo cutee

SkyxMicah aw :3

Aww i love fics like this :3

I...don't...know..how...to feel aout ths...chapter

ew. i dont like anyone except mikah. D: the story plotline is still cool though c:

OMG that was brilliant! I love it! I can't say wich couple I love more. They're all just way too cute!

I already like this story.

Well that was an interesting read. It took me a while, but I did it. LOL. I love it. I really do; I thnk you have a great plot. But I do have constructive criticism though.

For one, your characters seem shallowly developed outside their love lives. I realize that it's probably because that's what the story is about, but even so, chracters development is essential for a story to seem alive. Also, you try to create angst for Mikah, I believe, but that seemed kind of weak as well. I don't know. It just seems like a lot of overstating to me. His situation isn't that bad, not any worse than mine or anyone that lives in my town. And the ending seems kind of abrupt. I know ending a story at a sad part with a sort of cliffhanger is popular, but it's still hard to do correctly.

Note. I did not say this to be mean. I love your story, I really do. The humor amuses me and the romance makes me smile. And I know it's a little too late to critique, but I though I'd do it anyways. And after all, this story is old. I'm positive you're a whole of a lot better writer now. I do love this, and I'll be reading the sequal soon!

I keep thinking I've reviewed this story (and I may have. If so, forget that last statement, and pretty much this whole thing, 'cause it's likely I've said it before . I have a really bad memory).

At first my favourite character was Mikah, but throughout the story it changed and became Kael. I can't help it - he's so damn cute!

I know I'm reviewing for the first chapter, but I've read the whole thing .

Your writing is amazing! I love the way you describe emotions, and that you don't skip over anything.

I'd write more, but I have a tonne of homework, and most of it's due tommorow xD

Anyway, this was a great story!

Ciao!

WOW! amazing! i am about to go onto Reckless -

*grins*

It took me like...4 days to read the whole thing, but i finally did it! And i'm so impressed with this story! It was really good! And now i'm going to read reckless! yay

Kepp up the great work!

~Kyle's Precious Little Girl

Oh my God! How could it end like this? Well, I must start read Reckless now,because this was to cruel!:'( But the story is the best!

Ah! They are so sweet together! Even though Kael is really angsty! But I like that!

Poor Kael!I feel so sorry for him! But he's still cute, though!