ah. freaky freaky freaky.

*shudder*

good chapter. good story so far.

: ) CD

Poke, poke.
You there? Helo!
update? please?
anything? something?
Robyn

OMG OMG OMG! What happened to him? Heather you can't do this to me! Update as soon as you get this or face the wrath of the kitchen aide! MWAHAHAHAH! Sorry. Randomness. You expected reviews so now you got them. I got home an hour ago. That's all. And I'm already reading this great story! Love Alyssa.

Heather! Hi! Its Docks from camp. Hope you haven't forgotten me already. Oh well. I LOVE IT! ITS GREAT! You better update soon Crazy! Or I'll die. And you'll have murdered me. Then who will repaint the carts with you again...? Or talk about Sword of Truth? HMM? NO ONE! That's who! You better update!

excellent. you updated.
well i don't really have much to say except i'm glad that you are picking a couple stories to finish and this is one of them.
talk to you later
robyn

aww boo, no more chapters and right at a cliff hanger. don't think i don't know that you did that deliberately.
fine then, i'll just leave without actually saying anything about this chapter. so there :P muahahaha
later
robyn

aww, poor harmonylsarine, of COURSE you deserve reviews. ESPECIALLY since you updated twice in one day ;) poor pet...
condesending enough? muahhahaha.
So as soon as i was done reviewing your last story, i read your summary and was complete ashamed of myself for being surprised by the ending... a staff with it's own agenda, duh robyn! clue in! but whatever, we all have our stupid days. mine just happens to be today
okay, on to your other story
GREAT! wonderful, terrific, and i'm pretty sure fantastic. So far. Who knows, you might screw it up from here on in. But i have faith you won't.
I must say, i'm really impressed with the way you take pretty old concepts and ideas and rework them so that you make them original again. Unbelievable talent in that not so simple act. So it really makes your stories a pleasure to read.
Merlin was the one exception. That device is just old and tired and its like flagging a dead horse with a stick. the horse STILL isn't going anywhere. But there's nothing you could do about that because you needed a famous wizard that carl would recognize to know what the other one was talking about. Doing it a different way would be kinda interesting too. But i don't know what you could do. I also wasn't fond of the way you introduced the subjec of carls' potential but i forgot about it when i continued into the story. Which is important. You're allowed to screw up or write less nicely occasionally but only if you can cover it well. Which you did. I'm also wondering if you are going to, or if you have already explained why vass told carl about his abilities at that particular time... just curious.
i DON"T like the name carl, but that's a personal thing. :D just one question, considering Vass is such an original name, why did you decide to go with carl? a boring, ugly name? (sorry, i have this big thing with the name, lots of bad memories) I have some suggestions if you want them for futur stories.
I like the humour you've injected into these chapters. It isn't over the top and instead characterises your main character. it also keeps things lively and entertainning in longer stories. That was one concern of mine in the other story i reviewed, it was so charged with emotion that i was a little worried you wouldn't be able to write any other way becuase that's the way you normally wrote. It's hard to write stories that are continually emotional. They are tiring on the reader AND the writer.
So it was a pleasant surprise and delight to see you were able to switch your style completely. Although still in the first person, but that's okay. ;) I'm having difficulty doing it in my own writing. Going from angst to a novel mode so my story isn't going to fast. ugh. but it'll get there, eventually...
also, a word of caution. from your summary, this sounds kinda like a serious story, but the humour that you've injected, which i enjoy, tends to make this fact obscure. so while it's nice, if you REALLY want something to be serious, you might want to limit it just a little bit. i have full confidence in your ability to do so, especially considering your last story.
anywho, gotta go.
Talk to you later
Robyn

I love the comentary! Excuse my spelling please. I like the whole story line so far, although, it moves slowly. What is the incident? So far great story.

I love it! i'm too into other plaents and junk like that to do even a decent real world based story, i've tried before and it always ends up as something totally different. please write more soon!

~the one who loves cats and is insane. Randomness is fun~

Kit

Well, I'm definitely intrigued. Where's this going? And what's the 'Incident'? More please! _

This is interesting...

Hey! yay! new story! ooh... so mysterious... what happened? who's telling the story? aw... what happened? lol of course you're going to tell us! hehe. Oh, and thanks by the way for reviewing! ... yeah i know i'm pretty fast typing it out.. but I want to finish it before the summer's over... hehehe. So my g-ma can send it to one of her friends with the "connection" lol. well.. update soon! I want to know what happened! lol oh yeah.. btw.. i'm kinda using this as my email to you because uh... i kinda forgot what number of our RE: no more we were on lol. well gotta go! it's late O.O"