Reviews for The Movie Twins
lostinscotland chapter 1 . 7/15/2003
sounds interesting so far. my only crit is the dialogue. for one thing, it's a tad confusing, trying to figure out who's speaking all the time. and when they were first discussing josh, it took me quite a while to figure out which one's boyfriend he was...


*"If you say so." Said LLana unsure if that was possible.*

ok, there should be a comma after 'say so', then don't capitalize 'said'.

"If you say so," said LLana, unsure if that was possible.

like that.

anyways, good story, keep it up!