|Reviews for Then and Now
| Faery66 chapter 16 . 6/7/2017
Hope to read more soon
| Proofreader1962 chapter 16 . 4/11/2016
Have you considered e-publishing through Amazon, or other such venues?
| Proofreader1962 chapter 11 . 4/11/2016
I've noticed a tendency to leave apostrophes out of your possessive nouns and pronouns. Also word choices are occasionally wrong-usually in the case of having a homophone such as: two, too and to
| aynaarah chapter 1 . 12/8/2014
I read this story .. and for me.. it could have been more.. but all the letters in the beginning left a mystery..unsolved.. and no small numbers of question marks..
..and I could have jumped to so many conclusion regarding who Faun is and what he is.. but none of it prepared me to see a healthy strong character that demystifies all I would had initially assumed..
and then with Lin and his legacy.. nice going to the land of dreams and bringing back history and an atmosphere that would have eluded you otherwise - especially if I am thinking about Lin's closet ..like the costumes? there was no need for that, it made things fake..
Lin has a way of answering that spices things up.. very funny sometimes.. and it makes it a little bit surreal .. old time like.. and Taz too.. but then the ancestral/dignified/dreamy/sarcastic touch washes down to one of a common twenty century gay party..
And good thing you kept the readers innocents.. not even much love/sex scenes.. but at the end you give them a sweet xeno scene..
I am probably overstepping my review rights but.. why didn't you kept tings under control by simplifying them? ..you had humans and elves and well the half breeds.. maybe the witch.. maybe.. why go for an entire zoo? ..then be decisive and choose if you want to write a gangster story, to explore a high elven culture, youngster's clubbing and shopping adventures or report an abuse story.. ..but your elf had to turn vampire/catlike.. ..and your tough, hard trained, smart old elf had to turn submissive and abused and tormented by nightmares and more clueless and beaten then the street child and a rained rat.. and so on.. and Faun has more of a elf name then.. well then Lin maybe..
I don't know, but I'm learning a lot from your story... it was an interesting exercise... thank you
| Guest chapter 16 . 5/10/2013
| K chapter 16 . 4/12/2013
This was a great story! Very well written and engaging. I admit the squick was sort of necessary, but it *was* kind of squicky.
| Guest chapter 3 . 12/21/2012
Holy shit! You know the just so stories?!
I actually had a hissy with my 300lvl British Lit prof because she'd never heard of them and only knew Kipling from his racist poetry, not the adorable children's' short stories. Thus, she took it as truth rather than sarcasm... and wouldn't believe me that such stories even existed for the longest.
I'm sooooo glad someone else knows 'the cat that walked by himself'! And from the butterfly reference in the collar-hunt, I'm guessing passing interest in 'the butterfly who stomped' as well? Hehehe...
| Guest chapter 16 . 8/8/2012
Thoroughly enjoyed the use of truism, through out this story. Mixed with the right amount of optimism gives an awareness of a constant reality. Emotive writing is easy to do, but hard to convey consistently without losing the plot. Sorry bad pun. Read this after the 'Z' series and it just flowed. Thank you. Hx
| Guest chapter 11 . 7/7/2012
Hey, are you by any chance have a coffe addiction? Because Lin and Faun do))
| NormaJean Beausoleil chapter 16 . 5/14/2012
great story. it's interesting that you used passive voice for the final action sequence. i love the characters. thanks for sharing!
| NormaJean Beausoleil chapter 8 . 5/12/2012
touching and sweet and utterly realistic. bravo.
| Tigaroo chapter 9 . 6/7/2011
I do like this soty, but the sentences with words missing is very jarring.
| PrincessJulius chapter 4 . 10/8/2010
Man! That is something i would totally do. RUN! lol. they're so cute. Yay for fluffiness!
| PrincessJulius chapter 3 . 10/8/2010
nifty. The thing with his hair is cute. And the entire shopping thing was really good. To fit so many events and stuff and time into small paragraphs without dragging it on is hard to do, you're great at it!
| PrincessJulius chapter 1 . 10/8/2010
jezzo! that was a long chapter! but, It. Was. AMAZING!
the entire storyline and the way you capture the characters attitudes and behavior and stuff! i like your writing style to. Easy to follow. _
i cannot wait to read more.