Yet another good chapter! I know ppl are saying this is off to a slow start, but who wants to waste the climax in the first four chapters anyway? It's going nice and smoothly and I'm starting to sense a little foreshadowing, so that's good too. Patience is a virtue, ppl!

~~Ciao~~

aulliana

What a fabulous chapter! I think this is starting to become my new favourite story on fictionpress! It's so great! The characters are realistic, the description is just right, the dialogue is great and the content is interesting. What more could it need? Update chapter #5 soon! I'm looking forward to it!

I've been meaning to review this for a while, but for some reason I never got around to it. Heh. Well, anyway, I think this is a fantastic story. These characters are extremely well drawn out, and I actually like how the full plot of the story hasn't come out yet. It gives the reviewers time to get to know the lives of these characters pretty well, and not a lot of fics do that anymore. I can't wait until the next update.

Wow...Malcolm gets so many chances to peek...I am wondering how young guys get the urge to go buy condoms...anyhows, Octavia seems alright. I mean she's not stand offish. Are there people like AAron? Who is his "clients"?

Yet another great chapter!

We get to see a bit more of Malcolm's horny boy side _ At least he didn't try to pounce on her while she was changing...at least.

Keep up the fabulous work.

Jess

i am here til the very end. this is a great fic. and well this is great, it is going a little slow, but thats alright, because you always come out in the end. this fic is def. a keeper lol keep it up luv.

nik

OOh. Meeting the parents. Scary stuff. It's kind of weird though because all of the sudden Malcolm is a sort of ladies man. At least that's how I feel. Interesting story. I like your characters.

You've really put Malcolm's character to life. He seems so real, which is why the story is so good already. I'll be waiting for your next update!

"My right hand would serve me just fine until then." Haha. You have some fuckin' funny lines in your stories. This chapter was just as good as the first. I'm actually happy for Malcolm. He seems like such a cutie.

I like this already! What an interesting first chapter...hm...what could those Tarot cards mean? Poor Malcolm. But then again...he got with that Octavia girl's phone number...

This is really good so far. I like it alot. Malcom is a cool character. He doesn't take himself to seriously, and he's not up himself, which makes it more interesting to read. I reckon it also makes the story more appealing to the 'average' person when he's a normal guy. Anyhoo, I'm babbling. I also really like you other story 'priceless' so I hope you update both soon.

First off, you already know that I absolutely *LOVE* this story, but have I told you why? Don't think so! Anyway, something that I really love in stories is when they're believable, when they're real, when they're characters are real. You've accomplished this to death many, many times, and it looks like you've done it again. *applauds Kaika* Yay for you! Malcolm is one of the most believable characters I've ever read. That line in chapter 2 about his right hand being perfectly good enough for him was just perfect. Had me clapping my hand to my mouth and wondering, "Can she *write* that?" Well, you did, and it was hilarious and true. Damn boys, always thinking that way... but that's *real*, and that's what you've accomplished in this writing.

There, I had to say that, so, onto this chapter:

Loved it, yay muchly. The part where Malcolm describes his seeing people naked was hysterical. As I write this, I have to keep myself from laughing out loud, as my mother is sleeping in the next room, but I can snigger to myself. Every aspect of Malcolm just fascinates me, because he's so original. Making faces at himself in the mirror: priceless!

"I suddenly despised Italy." Even though I'm Italian, well half, I still couldn't help but laugh at this line. Malcolm's sense of humor is perfect. He's just got this very cyncial outlook on life and that's great. Typical boy, if I do say so myself. You're also really good at "writing boys." Damn, you've just gotta have all these good things about this story don't you? Ah well, all the more entertaining for us readers. Oh, and ick on the dolphin part. I couldn't imagine cutting up Flipper and eating him. Even though they did kill Babe...

Ick, I *hate* when parents get all over-protective on you. Malcolm doesn't seem to like it too much either. Devilishly handsome. *snort* Sarcasm is great for everyone.

OOh, foreshadowing at the end... spooky. Poor Malcolm, I kind of feel bad for him because I have pretty good ideas, basically, about what's coming in the future. You're summary for this story explains as much. I still love this story, though, and hope that you update it soon. Great work! Just thought I'd throw that in there after reading one of your responses to a reviewer, haha. Seriously, though, I look foward to more.

Cheers

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Winged One

yeah this is one great story. very nice. something bad is gonna happen so update soon. i need to find out what happens to malcom!

hey, another great story from you! And this one actually has a guy as a main character (it seems most of the stories on has a girl as the protagonist for some reason). Well, even tho this story only just started, it's got me hooked already. Need to know what happens next! Can't wait till next update.

If every person on this site wrote chapters as long as yours, the world wold be a much better place.

No, I didn't steal that from a fortune cookie, but it really sounds like it,

Bejipan