OOh, I like this one. Octavia.. I have a feeling she's using him or something, maybe to get back at her ex? I don't know. Just seems too suspicious. *shrugs* Can't wait to read more. ))

-x- Jenna

This is entertaining and enjoyable. I can't wait to find out what happens next. Update soon! _

Good work. EXCELLENT work. *bobs head*

Yes, I'd have to say that was very good.

Keep it up. _

This story is so good _ Just fabulous so far.

~Arayuldawen~

Very nice story. Can't wait for the next update.

This story is progressing really well. We're learning more about the characters...isn't it a little suspicious that this popular girl would suddenly find an unknown guy "cute"? Haha...I was smiling to myself when I was reading the part about "apple pie fresh"...undertone humor...i like that

Nicely done! I like this a lot. Malcolm sounds like an interesting guy. That sucks that all of his tarot cards were bad. I don't really believe in tarot cards being truthful, but we'll see how you put those three words Malcolm got, into play. Keep writing! _

Hey! I really liked this chapter, please write more, it's a really good start. Will def. read nxt one :)

Don't think you should change your style cause it's great.

Cali.

I think I'm gonna like this one...the character's about my age this time, and I like the foreboding you have right at the beginning. There's a lot going on, which means lots of good possible plot twists. Can't wait for the next chapter.

OOh, spooky! All right, so not spooky, more like foreshadowing! Anyway, I *really* like this so far, and it's only the first chapter. Malcolm seems like a very realistic boy, and he's also very interesting and cracks me up at times. The permit part was the best. I know exactly how he feels. I also like Mercedes, and while I don't know if there's much use in hoping for them, I think she and Malcolm would be cute together.

Can't wait to see where the story goes, and I'll be looking foward to reading more!

Cheers

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Winged One

This is good, except for one thing, you've got your tarot readings wrong...

The way it works is that the person being read shuffles the cards three times, while asking a question ins their heads, and then hands themback to the person doing the reading, who pulls several cards (not sure how many, I've just had my friend do my readings several times)and that's how it works, it answers a question doesn't exactly give you what's going to happen, it just gives you advice for your future, like... Once I got a response that said 'open up to people and everything will go fine.' See what I mean, but otherwise, it's a very good beginning

ahh another great story...well i woke up rather late this morning, and i probably should get ready since i was supposed to be ready an hour ago...hm oh well

good chapter...very interesting...cool, its from a guy's point of view...and maybe the tarot cards were right cuz of Octavia...i think she's the girl who's going to use Malcolm...terrific beginning...i find his personal voice funny

This is so interesting _ Malcolm is so intruiging. I wonder how things will go with Octavia, and what the whole Tarot Card thingy was about, if its all true. Well, update as soon as you can.

~Arayuldawen~

i rly like this, keep on writing to it!