awesome chapter! coach hunt seems really desperate. the part with the beetles actually freaked me out! (sorry this review is crap but i wanna get to read chap 19!)

Hi, I'm writing to let you know I haven't been uploading any of my work because someone has been plagerizing it. Until everything is cleared up, I'm keeping off of fictionpress. However, if you have a livejournal you can add me (xlolita_complex) and my work will be on there, and there's also a syringeoverload community if you're interested.

Thanks so much for taking your time to enjoy my work Dolly

I would of neva expected that. Mad story. Update soon!

You're disgusting and i always hated Malcom from the beginning from when you first started writing it. You're so sick that you have to write about two boys sucking each other? or watever. just hurry up and write Autumn Came and Vogue

I'm really sorry I haven't reviewed in a while. Bad, bad me. I truly meant to review for chapter 19, but I guess it just got jumbled up in the million other things I have to do. Enough with excuses, on with the 19: I always feel uneasy when Malcolm goes on these little money-making expeditions. They just seem to make him hurt so much mentally. I feel so bad for him. Why does he feel he has to make that much money! Why? With all the other things he's got to worry about, money should be the least of his worries. Jon. Jon. Jon. I don't feel as bad for Jon as I did when we first found out he was being beat. I mean, sure he's got to leave home, but home wasn't really a joyous place, right? I would do anything to get away from there. Curiously, will Malcolm and Jon remain friends when Jon leaves? I'm not sure whether or not they will, because I can't tell how strong of a bond they have. Anyway, the after prom get together with Malcolm and Octavia was pretty much expected. I never thought they would have sex with each other, not even from the beginning. They just seemed like a cute little couple that would never really get past third base. Or maybe I'm completely wrong and they do such things in later chapters. Who knows. You always manage to surprise me. Ok, moving on...Chapter 20: *Grumbles* Octavia...what a disappointment. I've always secretly had something against her. I was never really sure, but she just rubbed me the wrong way. I never wanted to say something because I really felt like I was way off...and I kind of hoped just that. I mean, who would want Malcolm to have a girlfriend that would just upset him? Not me. I guess I figured that if you and so many others liked her, my feelings were way off. While I'm sure she never meant to hurt Malcolm, (just like I'm sure she never meant to hook up with Nathan, I still can't help but be pissed at her. Bah. Oh, and while we're on the subject of slutbags, his mom is an exemplary example of just that. What a foul bitch. To hide that from both Malcolm and his dad for over 15 years! What's she playing at? I mean, what's her logic, honestly? "Oh, well let's see...Malcolm's sick with a serious heart condition, I haven't seen either Malcolm or my ex-husband because I fell off the face of the earth to go live wherever...how can I make Malcolm feel better? I know! Let's tell him that his father isn't really his father and that I've been lying to them both for 15 years. Oh, and while I'm at it, I'm going to try and take Malcolm from the only father he's ever known! Perfect!" Pfft. If you ask me, she can shove it. I'm not in the mood for people like her. Anyway, last thing: where's Mercedes been? I haven't heard from her in a while. Just curious..This review is very long. Sorry again for not reviewing. Update soon!.Jess

Wow, what cant I say. This was probably one of the best chapters by far. I never saw that one coming. I figured the whole betrayal card had to come up sometime, but from Octavia AND his own mother...sheesh, how much more can a dying kid take? Brilliant!

Whoa. If this chapter didn't showcase betrayal for us, I don't know what would. (and I think he's kinda been in misery for a while now. don't know why, but it seems to come out from the page that he's a bit misarable with his life!) I guess it'll be slightly harder to explicitly give a scene and then end with "Betrayal." Harder than the "ruin" (fire) scene anyway. I still like the story! and you update great )

im sorry.. you mind me saying.. HOLY SHIT!

this poor kid. you just wont let up huh? damn you..

i feel so bad.. first his girlfriend who he should just say fuck off. and his poor father hes such a nice guy. damn and that heart! argh awesome fic! lol keep it up babezz

nik

Could his life suck any more? Wait- I don't want to know.

Anyway, good job. Very interesting chapter. Just when I think everything's as screwed as it could be... it gets worse. I gotta wonder if and when anyone will find out he's selling himself. Which would be interesting, too.

I look forward to the nect chapter!

That was a cute chapter. I'm mad that she kissed Nate, though. Even if it is really nothing, it's not right! Ah well. It's all fake anyway, hah. Yes, I really liked this chapter, I don't know why. But good work!

i really like this. umm idk what to say lol. that was alittle strange that he got a blow job from a guy and liked it but i guess it would be the same feelings as if a girl did it... maybe? idk im a girl lol. but yeah and well i loved the way you make them seem so real, like real people and stuff very good. keep up the good work and ill read it!

nik

Hey. haha. have finally made my way to your lastest chapter. Unfortunately, I need to get off the computer now, so this is just to let you know I've read til here! I'll probably send you an email or something to give you my general impressions up til here! ) heh. Do hope you'll update soon. You have more chapters written right? heh!

FINALLY, I can log in. hmm, seems fictionpress format has changed. Maybe that's why the site was down for so long! haha. I'm great at stating the obvious p Anyway, one thing.. didn't Malcom's dad give him a phone so that his long distance calls home didn't get charged on Hollan's bill? Cause I think it was the last chapter.. he used Hollan's phone right? Besides that, thank god you didn't make him go all floppy and decide that maybe he liked Hollan too. And have a fling with her! She seems alright, but obviously not enough written about her for me to decide whether or not I like her! haha. )

omg. That was so.. \

I still can't figure out Octavia, she seems too good to be true. On the other hand, I have this really bad feeling that Malcom has contracted something unpleasant (read: cancer). Please no! \ bleah. I wanted to say something else, but I've forgotten. Great memory, huh? Oh yeah, I can't believe he agreed! (to Aaron's offer) Can't say that I didn't see that coming though. I just hope that he never ends up going through with it.

Aaron makes me think.. Greasy, for some weird reason. Don't particularly like him. Why do I have this feeling that he's going to be the start of Malcom's "destruction"? haha. I kinda like the way Malcom thinks, it's really funny. And.. haha, his eyes sure got a whole load of exercise this chapter! I'm still wondering what it is that Octavia wants with him. Really am. It seems really weird that she'd just suddenly decide that she wants to go out with him. (Maybe she's doing it to make Nathan jealous -horrors!-)