Reviews for workin' on title
Wang Xi-feng chapter 1 . 4/23/2005
I actually quite liked this. I thought the emotions were pretty true to life, and you have some really good descriptions going here.

This could be a little better formatted, though; it shows up on my screen as one big paragraph, and it might be easier on the eyes if you broke it into smaller chunks. FP's editing system is a bit of a pain, though.

All in all, good job. _