Reviews for One day all that was known
allison chapter 1 . 10/30/2003
Hey very very good. I like it very much but i think u should take out that comment about the server in the middle of it. Its not part of the poem and it kinda interrups the flow of it. apart from that, muy bueno.

-Allison
Becca chapter 1 . 10/30/2003
so some of the poem needs work. for example, some of the punctuation was messed up and didnt make sense where it was placed, but thats ok! anyway i liked it but your right, some of it is mismatched, but it was still good!



becca
dolpfan33 chapter 1 . 10/30/2003
pretty good
Gabi chapter 1 . 10/30/2003
i really liked the verse that goes 'that is why i implore to thine own spirit'i think it was really well written. but maybe there could have been like a pause (-) after 'remain' in the second stanza. i think that the poem was/is really good, and maybe better that it was longer? you developed the mood more throughout the rest of the poem, and i think that has a huge impact on the reader.
Isis Reborn chapter 1 . 6/14/2003
Well done,

An awesome piece of writing I must say, now I feel the need to read the other works under your name. :)