Reviews for Children
MandELLA chapter 1 . 6/26/2003
woo! I like this! Esp. the last sentance. Even my mom liked it (she's standing behind me) i'm glad you finally wrote some more stuff!

MandELLA
absolute0 chapter 1 . 6/15/2003
Nice imagery. I can just imagine scenes from time-lapse photography of a rose's growth which you compared to children... I think. I like the third stanza and the ending sums it in a bit of an unexpected manner but witty.
Toireasa chapter 1 . 6/14/2003
Fabulous description and rhythym. I loved it.
DefianceIsMe chapter 1 . 6/14/2003
Profoud...beautiful description. Amazing...
blinkie chapter 1 . 6/14/2003
very nice 'scene-by-scene' rendering of the death of a flower. i dont undersatnd why it's called 'children', though.

blinkie
Amethyst Star chapter 1 . 6/14/2003
Excellent style of writing and good choice of words...but, one thing: confused. I'm not sure exactly what is being described. A flower?