Hmm, very interesting. I especially liked all the creative words and such in the prolouge. Keep going, I'm interested to see how this will turn out.

Wow, that was really really good. And I'm not just saying that. I reread the ch1 and your writing has improved a LOT! I am actually more interested in Tarja and Moira, and how that all came to be, than what's up with Kat, since we know she's probably going to end up with Tarja, at least for a while, before she breaks off if she realizes what's going on... or just goes with it! That'd be cool. But if she breaks off, Tarja will (try) to kill her. Hmm, that could be a cool fight. I read the prologue and it reminds me a lot of what I'm actually writing with Circle right now (not exact- but just the becoming/forced to be what your parents would hate story) Anyway, I now am looking forward to seeing the rest of this. Again, really great prologue. You may even want to go back and rewrite ch1. I really like the culture you've got going with the Lahbi. I love exploring those kinds of backgrounds, don't you? Oi, I wonder how many laws I'll find among the Teloraimce, or if I actually manage to talk to a Serpentis who knows all of the Serpentis laws... ::sigh:: _ Until! Ollie

Great start! Instead of 'monochrome light' you should say 'monochromatic light', and you have a lowercase at the beginning of a sentence, but other than that there arent any errors. You have good imagery and are very descriptive, keep it up! : )

hey girl! good to see your keeping up with your writing! I love the premise of this story, and your characters are well drawn! keep it up!

Unabashed fan right here, please! Yeah... That was really good. There's this disturbing atmosphere lingering over it, that makes even the slightest action immensely creepy. I have to admit, though, I don't like Katherine - which is a wonderful accomplishment on your part, to characterize somebody so quickly and so effectively. I'm warming up to her, but her personality did a 180 when Roe came around, so its hard to say what I'm warming up to. Anyway, love it, great job, yada yada, it's even on the verge of 'favorites.' I can't wait to see where you go with it.

Interesting first chapter. I really like the name "Roe." I also have the feeling that this guy is a shapeshifter like Kat. ;) Kat seems a little standoffish for one so worried about her stance in the social ladder. Instead of flipping the guys off, I'd imagine she'd just ignore them. Otherwise she sounds like she is the social outcast, and that Scott dumped her. At least, that was the vibe I got until it was mentioned that the voice had dumped him. BTW, interesting twist with the whole voice living in her head bit. I'm wondering if it's her subconscious/the cat, or something entirely different inhabiting her brain. I'm also interested to see what these "bad things" were that happened when she disobeyed. Until, Ollie

Hm. A Kat and a dog-collar wearer. Hm again. ;) I like this first chapter, and it's nicely paced too. Looking forward to the rest of it.

"This is a pretty small town. You just don't want to be labelled different here." Tell me about it. Believe me, I do not want to go round my own home town telling people I'm a rabbit. :(

I love cats. Roe sounds sexy... update soon :)

hey girl! nice to see you got some new stuff up! it's been ages and I've been craving some more! anyways, the story is wicked good, and since I am the only one that really knows the plot('cept you of course) I have to say, the idea is really really original, and it fits too, so put up another chappie soon or I will have to kill you. J/K...not really, maybe a slap, or even a poke...never mind me..I'm sick...*cough cough*