Reviews for Obsidian Skies Roughdraft |
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uncreative pseudonym chapter 16 . 8/30/2003 I finally got around to finishing this, and I'm glad I did. Well, I'd say it was a depressing story, if not for the fact that this is a prologue. Well done indeed. For people other than myself, I think you've created a great deal of emotional attachment to the story. The multiple final battles part was well done, and the battles themselves pretty cool. Definitely my type. I'll read Guardian, whenever it comes out. |
Katra chapter 16 . 8/28/2003 ASTOUNDING! Great ending to a phenominal story. Vallen was really pouring her heart out. Khyria is missing? Wow, that was unexpected. I thought Vallen trasported her to a safe place, along with her friends. And Khellendros is evil? I thought for sure he would be the main character in Guardian. Remecrion must be really powerful to make Khellendros join the side of evil. I am readily anticipating Guardian. Please, make haste and post it! |
Katra chapter 15 . 8/28/2003 Excellent fight scene and great dialogue. I'm stunned you decided to kill off Andronicus. And Khellendros was there to witness it. How sad. I can't even explain fully what I want to say because I am so stunned. Great story, and sad, but great ending. |
Katra chapter 14 . 8/27/2003 And so, the great Horseman of War slept. What a great line. Another horseman bites the dust. This is most unsettling. Andronicus has already lost his wife and now his best friend. Remecrion is in for the fight of his life! |
Katra chapter 13 . 8/27/2003 Nice profile. So Deus is the Horseman of Hunger. That takes care of all four horsemen. But now that Zephyr is dead, what happens to the Horseman of Strife? |
Katra chapter 12 . 8/26/2003 How unsettling. Zephyr died and Andronicus didn't even realize it. Remecrion will pay. |
Jenn-chan aka KristinaToffland chapter 16 . 8/25/2003 Excellente! can't wait for the sequel! really dude, the flow of your words, the development of your characters, it't truly something to behold! keep up the great work and please continue to support my stories( just had to add that,) hee he, much love, Kris |
uncreative pseudonym chapter 5 . 8/25/2003 Very interesting. I am afraid I must go now, but I will make a definite effort to finish your story soon. My review is one among many, but regardless, here I go: Demonic tongues are always interesting. Is it created by a random syllable complex, or do you have a language worked out? I have no idea how you are using the word demon, whether in Hebrew, English tradition, or perhaps a form of the Japanese "oni." Obviously, this is your take on it, so it isn't like you can really be wrong. Interesting. Your descriptions are decently done, and show an obvious affinity for adjectives. Very good. |
Versago the Destroyer chapter 16 . 8/24/2003 I never really payed much attention to Vallen until now. I feel so sorry for her. She all alone. Khellendros is evil? Another shocker. And Kyria is missing? Man. Vallen sounds so desperate in her plea. But after I read the little poem thing at the end, I got pumped! I'M READY FOR GUARDIAN! |
Versago the Destroyer chapter 15 . 8/24/2003 HOLY F*ING SHIT! YOU KILLED ANDRONICUS? AND I THOUGHT GELLIDUS DYING WAS A SURPRISE! So looks like evil won this battle. Poor, poor, poor Khellendros and Khyria. They lost their whole family in one freakin' day! I still can't believe that Remecrion killed Andronicus with his own gun. That was a sad, but nice touch. I also like the whole magic bullet thing, too. Man, I'm gonna cry again! This was a very sad, but good ending. |
Versago the Destroyer chapter 14 . 8/24/2003 I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU DID THAT! YOU KILLED THE BEST CHARACTER IN THE STORY? WHY? WHY? GELLIDUS, YOU WILL BE MISSED! (starts crying like a baby). Nice chapter, but man, I'm still speechless. |
Devious Angel XDemon chapter 16 . 8/23/2003 O_O! GAH! This was such a great great great **goes on and on about the greatness**. _ I really enjoyed the prologue. |
The Dark Swordsman chapter 16 . 8/23/2003 Hello everyone. I know you're all ready for Guardian. And I am working on the first chapter right now. But please fo scare yourself be reading my co-written story, Glorified. And also, which characters were your favorites in Obsidian? Just wanna know. The Dark Swordsman |
Lightbringer-88 chapter 16 . 8/22/2003 Well, there's nothing more I can say right? When will Guardian come out? |
Lightbringer-88 chapter 11 . 8/22/2003 Whoohoo! Shades of Devil May Cry! Anyway, just telling you: shoe wouldn't be o.k if Cain reached her. And from the looks of things, he was going to reach her. Shoe and she... 2. Cain smiled evil as he neared her. . . Isn't it evilly or summat like that? |