Reviews for The Four of The Great
Adaku chapter 1 . 4/29/2006
Yet another fantasy about elements, this kind of reminds me of WITCH, but all in all I like it. Keep up the good work!

Ayashino chapter 5 . 6/4/2004
This story is good, i hope you update soon! It read's pretty smoothly, can't wait until the next chapter!
Black and Silver Dreamer chapter 6 . 4/11/2004
Yes, start chp 6! I think I like Bing actually. Not sure why, might just be that her name is so much fun to say. Anyways, I like the idea and the way the story is going, the characters are adorable too, maybe adorable isn't the word I'm looking for exactly... but I like them!
Kezkay chapter 3 . 2/20/2004
backbackback, I'm finally back.
OOpsies, first sentence is in the passive tense. Might want to switch it around. Hehe, Shen made moss grow. Funny. ...sorry, it is!
Aww, poor Dien. She's my fav so far...wait, didn't I already say that in another review? Oh well. 0oo, That's what their names mean? Cool. Makes sense, since they have their own elements and whatnot.
Watch out for the it's vs. its. "..On it’s surface was a symbol done in black.." No apostrophe there.
Wait! Which woman disappeared? The good or bad? Gack! it was getting so interesting!
Oy, that -was- short. I shall return!
forgive and forget chapter 5 . 12/23/2003
Love the story, nice plot, characters everything. can't wait to read more!
Kezkay chapter 2 . 11/26/2003
HAHA! This chapter was so FUNNY! I could just imagine them dashing in and out of bushes and between trees going, "Look! A monkey!" and then running the other way. hehe, that was a nice run-on sentence, dontcha think? oh, shuddap.

EEk!” the pale girl let out a shriek, “A spider!” *rofl*

I especially liked all the descriptions of the separate powers, like when Bing froze the water or when Dien called fire to her hand. The only real crit I have for you is that the whole joining up into one happy party went a little fast, there were no suspicions, nothin'! Even after Dien almost took Bing's head off! Though, this all could be just because they're all youngins'! ...Or becuase I'm a wordy FREAK who can't just let things HAPPEN. I blame the latter. hehe, I'll be back to read more soon! -Kez
LusciousLife chapter 1 . 11/17/2003
Hi! Thank you for reviewing my story! This is really awesome! I like it alot so far! *gringrin* Do you write at ? I do, so I thought maybe since you like Kenshin and YuYu that you'd write over 'dere. Nice story! Love it!

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FurballofEvilness chapter 1 . 11/16/2003

interesting. elemental powers. destiny. evil.



Ravage Blue chapter 5 . 10/3/2003
hee hee. skirts are evil. i agree with Dien and Shen. hee hee. Bing is defintely the girly girl of the group. well um, could you pelase review mine? just asking! don't have to if you don't wnat to! i'm just asking! well GREAT CHAPTER! (again) NEXT ONE PLEASE!

Ravage Blue
Noel Diep chapter 1 . 9/26/2003
good story line and plot ]
Kezkay chapter 1 . 9/21/2003
hmm.. interesting beginning. I just have to wonder what exactly is ON the paper. Is it just a piece of paper? Or am I not supposed to know this yet...? If so, just ignore me.

This chapter was a lovely introduction to your main characters, though I might say, it went a little fast. I realize we're not supposed to know WHY the girls had to leave, but this sudden uprooting seems to be accepted pretty dang easily by young girls who seemed pretty happy with their present lifestyle. I mean there was no, "No, I like it here! Why should I leave? I won't go!" This is kinda odd beacuse they were never aware that they even had to go somewhere, whereas their guardians were. Am I just rambling here? I might be. This could just be character development/plot, and I am notoriously bad at recognizing this.

I like how each character has a certain power of nature, their element mixes with their physical description and attitude. Tres cool. I also liked how there were little hints as to each child's past and their future; just enough writing-oomf to get a reader hooked. Good job.

There were a coupla extra commas in there that messed up with your fluid style of writing, but not much else grammar-wise.

Hmm, that's all for me. Wait, no, that's not all... Rose Wolf was my favorite of your characters, though this could just be because I'm partial to anything with the word "wolf" in it. Especially names. This could be why my own fic centers around a wolf...hmm. Okay, now I'm done.

Coni chapter 1 . 9/13/2003
monica monica monica. :P I still have to read the other didn't tell me they were up! -_- besides...I'm adding u to my fav you have to too, and go read ch.2 of the Elements! NOW! :) lol
Ravage Blue chapter 5 . 9/10/2003
hey, you ahve a very interesting story here. keep it up. school has been slwoing me down too. i think it purposely sucks up any inspiration for a chapter, right out of you. it sucks. well anyway, i like Dien the most. she's cool. Bing seems to be kind of weak but oh well. GREAT CHAPTER! NEXT ONE PLEASE!

Ravage Blue
MoonDaughter17 chapter 5 . 9/10/2003
This was a really short chapter. We;;, anyway, update soon please.
Random Reader chapter 5 . 9/9/2003
That was a cool chapter. So was she like not wearing anything? Scandalous! hehehe I think a little more detail is in order. I can't wait to see her practice with the trainees.

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