That was a really good chapter. I really liked the description of the worlds, and the bonds between them, and everything...

great job keep writing

I just read the first chapter of this story.

I find this interesting in many ways.

The way you had no real characters but you did have dialogue brings out the sense of ignorance these people have of the world.

This feeling of ignorance branches out to the reader, bringing a sense of past to the story which is a nice touch to a story that happened in the past.

Very well written and I hope you continue

This has the makings of a great fantacy novel, I really hope that you deside to continue it. (sorry about the whole character thing in the first review) anyway though the only problem that I had was in the middle its pretty much all dialoge, and that can be really hard to read through, you might waht to put some detail in there to space out all that talking, it would inhance your story and make it more reader friendly. Keep going though, this had great potential and you should see it through.

now that's good. I cant wait for more.

Intresting, your writing is very good, and you write it in a style that makes me think that it took place millaniums ago. The only real propblem that I had with it was the fact that in this first part you had no characters. you had dialogue and people were talking but you never had a real character, that the reader could identify. Maybe your characters will come from the people who walk into the new world-if they are, then you can ignore me- good start though, I look forward to seeing what happens next.