Reviews for I'm Here |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Love this chap! Hahah awesome |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hahahah loved this chap. Al its supposed to love Cal! |
![]() ![]() ![]() What a cheater! Not ok, but yh:). |
![]() ![]() ![]() So cute, sux to b in luv wit ur str8 friend |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh. My. Gods. I wish I would have discovered this story when you were still writing it! Cal and Alex are just the cutest couple in the world. And their first time, lemme tell you. You wrote that scene better than any other lemon scene I've ever read on here! I'm not kidding, you described things in such an emotional way, and the depth of their love played such a huge part in it. A lot of writers write about making love, but the reader still doesn't feel the love. When I read that scene -hell, any scene- with Cal and Alex, I felt the love! And it was wonderful! Alice was definitely my favorite character. I swear, when I reach that age I will be just like her! And pairing her up with Paul, GENIUS. They were perfect together. I loved Mikey too. He is the kind of guy I really look up to. Brent never deserved him. You're an amazing writer! I'm going to go read more of your stuff now, k? Much love! Lil' Monster |
![]() ![]() ![]() awesome story...loved it |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's been roughly 7 years since you finished this and when you said something about being able to marry in Canada, I happily cheered for the 6 or 7 states in the US that are now legally accepting homosex. Isn't life great? Anyways - the story. Sappy in some areas, very amusing in others. Generally cliche all over, but still worth the read. (since when does cliche mean bad?) The lime and lemon weren't as bad as you made it, but I'm not the kind of person to like the intense kind of lemons. o_o So yours were good. I very much liked some of your characters, though I don't think I got a description of Alex, unless I skipped that part. The other characters were wild and very unnormal but really great. Uhhhhm, overall only a few grammar issues (like 'loose' trying to be 'lose', and 'each other' being treated as one word) and only one or two moments of confusion on who was speaking. Also, your review pleas were like sprinkles on the ice-cream-story. Soo funny. :] Luck with writing (if you still are) and with life. ~ibbit |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, this was so CUTE! I really loved this story. Cal and Alex are so adorable together! ~Oshini |
![]() ![]() This is AWESOME! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my gosh, this story was fantastic! It had just the right amount of angst and fluff, and parts of it had me crying, I was laughing so hard. I loved all of your characters (especially Alice and Paul). You gave even the smaller characters such personality - it made the story a lot more fun to read. Also, your lemon scene was descriptive and moving without feeling awkward or obscene. You balanced everything wonderfully, and I can't wait to read more of your work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really loved this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw, how cute. I love Cal and Alex. But somehow it doesn't feel right to leave Mikey's part in such a unfinished way. Anyways, great job. I love it. |
![]() ![]() :( POOR MIKEY! That makes me so sad... He makes me think of the awesome-ness that is Angel... From RENT? Yeah, THAT amazing. I need to finish reading this, still. Sorry I can't read this is in one day. I normally would, but I've had things to do. YAY! I HAVE AWESOME-NESS TO READ TOMORROW! |
![]() ![]() ![]() NEEDS TO FINISH TOMORROW! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well it's obvious you've never had sex before. The scene with Gary and the maids was absolutely disgusting and like something you'd see in a B-grade porn flick. Not to mention, it was degrading to women, not at all anatomically accurate, and also incredibly sexist. First of all, women don't "squirt" all over the place and they definitely don't leak "vaginal fluid" like a goddamn faucet. And while we're at it, the sight of a "hot hunk of flesh" does not automatically cause a woman to lose all inhibitions. Virgin/whore complex much? And if a woman was to have anal sex with a bedpost (not to mention double penetration), she would be torn bloody. Most likely, the lining between her anus and vagina would be torn apart. I'm sure it was great fun to write a scene in which a hetero male "regains" his manhood by fucking two vaginas (because that's what you've reduced the maids to). If you were trying to be ironic and comical and purposely distort a sex scene, then I think you not only missed but you now come off as a misogynistic and sexist, not to mention a terrible writer. If you seriously thought that was how people had sex, then if you're a woman, I fear for your health; if you're a man, I fear for the mental and physical health of the women you "fuck." |