Reviews for Innocent Smile
DeeEe chapter 1 . 1/8/2004
I did as you asked. This will be review number one. :) Now on to the actual review thing. It was okay... I like the method you used to tell the story, but you never really explained why she was crying. It didn't seem like she was that intensly upset near the end. OH! I know, add more the second to the last paragraph and have it wind back to where the story started.