Reviews for The Stepbrother |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this! I loved everything about it! |
![]() ![]() This is the best story ever I was feeling what the characters Felt please continue this it was amazing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww. |
![]() ![]() Beautiful story. I keep coming to read it every now and then, and also to see if you've written any more stories, but unfortunately you only have two. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Omg awesome story I found it totally and utterly ADORABLE! I loved Zach he was so hot and cute and such a sweetheart! Ahhh I don't want this to be the end...Are you doing a sequel because I want to keep reading about Zach and Jade! |
![]() ![]() ![]() did they not have sex in the end?! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Whoa. What is with Olivia in this chap? I don't remember her being this crazy. If I didn't know any better, I would have thought she were the pesky annoying character that's always complaining! XD |
![]() ![]() ![]() WHOAWHOAWHOAWHOAWHOA. I was totally pondering the possibility of them getting a divorce, but with the way they acted together, I never thought it would be true! THIS IS SO GREAT! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh GOSH. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i loved it so much! is there a sequel? please tell me if there is. :-) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok I got to ch5 and Jades character is so, sorry, annoying that I don't think I can go on. She gets mad at everything! Even regular talking. I kept getting confused and rereading passages because I thought I missed something as to why she was pitching a fit. And for her to feel weird about the stepbrother thing when she is dating her manager...right cause that's not taboo either. Also I feel like it was missing beginning chapters, maybe it should have started when she was first moving in with him so we see her feelings develop because if she's already been living with him for a month or so I'm sure that thought would have crossed her mind way before, especially with all the motorcycle rides. So maybe just a few tweaks, like more insight and jade not acting like a 14 yr old brat. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I enjoyed this story and a couple of your others, I really like your writing. I loved the characters and the story line, but feel the story was a little rushed. I also felt something was missing but can't figure out what and was a little disappointed with the end. It was romantic, but an epilogue to the future would of been nice. Great work though :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() nice. |
![]() ![]() ![]() you use to many fuck!ng exclamations dammit. |
![]() ![]() ![]() jade is too...animated, too happy, too noisy. :( |