Reviews for Morton the Octopus runs for President |
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![]() ![]() ![]() hahahaha this was good! |
![]() ![]() ![]() poor fish... and whats wrong w/ an octopus being named morton? hee hee this is funny. |
![]() ![]() ![]() heh heh an octopus for president... this sounds interesting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You said to me: Commandment number 11: "THOU SHALT NOT WRITE STUPID STUFF AND CLOGGETH THE INTERNET WITH IT" That's part of the tablet Moses forgot to read. All in all, if for no other reason than your readers' ever dwindling sanity, please post worthwhile pieces. Hm. I see a little hypocrisy here - how about you take a look at your won work before you flame others...you may find startling similarities. DjSaXoN tWo |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is it over? If it is, oh well, all good things must come to an end some time, and if it isn't... um... well... I don't think you'll be updating anytime soon anyways. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Poor Morton... Is it a little redindant to say this was really funny? Well it was. So yeah. On to chpater three! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Go Morton! Short chapter, but since it's not the only one, that can be ovelooked. You like animal torture, don't you? (kidding!) First the turkey... now Morton... |
![]() ![]() ![]() For a one-joke story, this is terribly funny. Unfortunately, I believe that most presidential campaigns really are run in this way. |
![]() ![]() ![]() emotions to blunt. "Morton was disliking" for example. Try to make the reader think about how he feels not just putting it out in the open. |
![]() ![]() ![]() once again for emphasis use italics not capitalization. The last sentence i would remove greatly or reword it, the sentence didnt flow right. Also don't use the word stupidest. I think it may be a word (unlike stupider) but dumbest always fits so much better. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok that WAS funny (cant use italics in reviews so i cant follow my own advice *sniff*) Hard to criticize on something of this length, overall it was good but add detail to the begenning and maybe more about their surroundings was hard to tell if they are wild.. or in an aquarium.. or what. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The reason I read this is because I thought you were writing about me...lol...my true name is Octavia Moton and people (my rude author friends) make jacked up stories about me, purposly mispelling my name. I like your story. Anything but yours truly, Cynical_Sweetheart |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it. I think the conversation between Morton and Geena could be a little longer though. I think you should follow up on the story with Morton's life at their house. |