D00RFR4M3 chapter 1 . 8/26/2011
Poor girl... Don't take this the wrong way, but I thought the only way you could get tetanus was from rusty metal? As in, it stabbing/scratching you, and drawing blood. I just asked my mom, whos a nurse, and she said that the only way she knows is a rusty something another coming into contact with your blood while its still inside your body. I'm not trying to correct you or anything. I'm simply curious if you CAN get tetanus other ways. Seems like a pretty good story so far, although not my usual cup of FictionPress tea. I go for the Action/Adventure/Romance/Fantasy. Later,

AkeOokami. AkeOokami means Bloody Wolf in Japanese.
Person chapter 29 . 8/21/2011
Wow, harsh. I thought Cha was a nice person, but to put someone to death just because they were jealous and didn't like be outshone and compared all the time. Yeesh, Cha has a mean side too.
Person chapter 27 . 8/21/2011
It seems they forgot all about the Queen being almost poisined. After Cha was proven innocent they completely forgot about investigating who actually did it, I wonder if it will come back and bite them in the butt?
Dustland chapter 3 . 7/31/2010
isn't it kind of ... vain?

he's a prince and he's just going to kiss a servant just cause shes incredibly beautiful?

they dont even know each other..

*sigh* but I'm going to keep reading for now
Dustland chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
that was the saddest prologue /

made me wanna cry.
HeARmeRaWR chapter 30 . 1/13/2010
OK so sorry about not reviewing before but I was too busy reading and I couldn't stop reading.

But now I will say everything I have been wanting to say since the first chapter... WOW! That was amazing! I loved this story so much!

There love is like epic, in my opinion. I think I have cried more in this story than I have in any other story I've read on this site in a long time.

When Cha got shot with the arrow thing and Jake was crying... I felt the heartache! That got to me like nothing else did.

Well, OK as you can see I can be very emotional but your story did that to me lol. Strangely enough this story reminded me of Tristan and Isolde. Even though Cha wasn't married to someone else and it didn't end tragically like theirs did. But it was still the whole forbidden love thing. Yeah I'm definitely a romance junkie and this story was my high XD LOL

Hope you write more stories like this in the future cause I will definitely read them, for sure _

Sorry for the long review but I couldn't help myself D
YoungInside chapter 31 . 6/12/2009
Oh, wow. That was a ride.

There were some parts of this story which made me physically cringe at the cliche-ness of it (I killed your father?)

but there were also moments where I smiled and gushed and was almost brought to tears by this tale.

I think it was a job well done. You write with emotion, and it conveys well.

At the beginning, Jake's love for Cha seemed shallow and purely based on appearance as we don't get to see much of the interaction between them for the beginning three months.

And about the Lord being killed and all of that, I found it really unnecessary in the whole scheme of things. It was.. really.. too.. just... too cliche and too.. well, it just makes you go "OHMYGOSH SO LAME."

but, I loved loved loved how you write with emotion, and how your male character is not afraid to cry. You delivered that very well.

Hoped this review helped in your rewriting. :)
LittleWolfPup chapter 30 . 4/26/2009
Loved I abously (maybe spellet wrong) love this story. I read u may be doing a sequel can't wait. ;) ;)
atreyu love chapter 20 . 6/9/2008
doesnt the doctor know Cha is actually alive

because he was the one that she had a pulse again.

so why isnt he telling Jake that Cha is alive?

that makes no sense to me :( lol

it would have worked better if they had another palace

doctor check up on him. lol

because the other Doctor knew about Cha being alive

wierd. lol :P
naivete chica chapter 30 . 12/25/2007
Wonderful story! I can't believe it took me this long to discover it, wow. What I loved most about this story was that it stood out from the crowd. Instead of girl hates arrogant prince who is unexpectedly attracted to girl... Jake is noble and caring, and Cha is compassionately pure. Although their fairytale ending is quite unrealistic.. even if the Queen approved, the rest of the nobility and kingdom would have been in uproar and rejected Cha as Princess.. i'll guiltily admit that I would have been devastated had you ended their story tragically. I cried my heart out when I thought Cha died! I think Cha's suffering made her seem so real and all the more deserving of her final happiness. Thanks for a great read! )
SALTY GOODNESS chapter 29 . 12/11/2007
I loved this story. So pretty and had a happy ending wich is always good. You had me worried a few times that they wernt gonna end up together but im glad they did, hope u continue with a sequel i would love to no wat happens with Cha and Jake. START IT SOON PLS.
glamoureste chapter 21 . 12/4/2007
oh thank GOD Cha came before he killed himself.

if you pulled a Romeo and Juliet... I would have seriously found out where you lived and beat the living shit out of you.

Okay, maybe not, but kld;asfjkl;dsaj fk;...

WHEW! Thank god they both lived!

Promethean Cult chapter 30 . 9/12/2007
Yay! Sickeningly sweet, sappy ending: the best kind of all. :D Great job on this story, by the way. I loved it from beginning to end and all that jazz.
Strangely Natural chapter 31 . 5/20/2007
Very sweet story, though it does need some tweeking, more detail perhaps, and elaborations, it's quite thrilling and a good read!
Tempest116 chapter 30 . 4/8/2007
That was a beautiful story, I really enjoyed reading it. Great job. _
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