Reviews for Apprentice
Thozmp Corris chapter 5 . 6/3/2004
First off, it's about time you got something up. Why does it seem that the "Yasuh"s come out of nowhere. Still good, especially the part about the laughing Raymond, and him being Akidan's father is funny enough to have anyone rolling on the ground. Jakia and Akidan, *also get's violently sick* and that's what I have to say about that. Normally I would cut off an arm for not updating quiker, but you need both to type so I'll let you off for now.
Till next time.
Thozmp Corris chapter 4 . 2/1/2004
Nice chapter, although the thing with Miosa the White Lord of Chaos was somewhat confusing, with her suddenly having two names and all. I'd also like to know how Akidan knew of The Beatles, leagends they may be, but did the really last that long? and finally, when you decided to try and beat me to a pulp, who was saying "Ow"? I'd never give chase with a battle ax, dagger or drumstick, my weapon of choice would be either my clan sword or a herring. Oh and I say your site ad for the story, that's how I found it.
You keep writing and I'll keep reading.
-"I've travled the world and I must tell you, I think the idiots have taken over."
Rebecca chapter 1 . 1/1/2004
It is good and tells you exatly what happens. It also has emotion showed from the character. I like it!
Thozmp Corris chapter 3 . 12/27/2003
Nice cliff hanger at the end, I can also see that your charecters have more depth now too. You still have to keep in mind where you want your story to go and how quickly you want it there, but that's up to you and I'm just gonna wait until you have another chapter posted, hopefully soon. It's a pleasure reading your work.
Thozmp Corris chapter 2 . 12/10/2003
I like it, but maybe you should also describe your charecter's a bit more. Write more soon.
Thozmp Corris chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
write more soon, hopefully you won't run out of ideas soon.
Ewoniel chapter 1 . 10/10/2003
Cool! WRITE THE NEXT CHAPTER! HURRY! I like how you made her 'know' the school, not like explaining it to us as we go. COOL COOL COOL STORY!
FuzyBluCaterpilr chapter 1 . 7/31/2003
Hey! Good work. I love the originality of it all. Keep it up.
secret chapter 1 . 7/22/2003
Very well written. is that the end or the first chapter?
Ecliptic Wolf chapter 1 . 7/21/2003
Hi! I'm just communicating with my readers; on I'm Admiral Sundance. Read some of that stuff, though it's a
Jesmajak chapter 1 . 7/20/2003
You were right!



Keep writing!