|Reviews for Addiction|
| Gigi chapter 2 . 5/31/2011
When you have only two characters in a certain situation, I don't see why you keep referring to their names all the time.
Eg:- "Elizabeth looked at Brian with her large green eyes.
Brian stared into Elizabeth's green eyes."
You don't need to use their names. Use "he" and "she" and read the difference it makes.
| chittychatty14 chapter 1 . 5/29/2008
your story has really disturbed me a lot...at first i thought the story involved was between a gal nd her cousin...nd dat is OK to sum extent (im not sayin tht it is gud...bt yeah to capture the interests of the readers well...its fine)
But this turned out to b a relationship with soblingxsibling...
Did u have any experience like tht or what...Are you mentally disturbed?
Although i really appreciate ur writing skills nd all tht...
bt u could hve atleast cme up with a cousinxcousin relationship instead...cause u see this story can offend a lot of people...it has even offended me...
You should seriously try some idea or the other...
maybe perhaps a best friend would also b a fine idea...
I really have no words to say after i read ur story,I actually felt disgusting...gross actually...
I mean ur story actually involves a brother and a sister here...who r sexually attracted to each other...You are actually insulting to the pure and the beautiful relationship of a brother and a sister(this appliers to u also).
Do you actually think like this about ur brother..Is that is what ur trying to convey? ur thought? on this story?..I hope not...
.I mean I myslef actually feel ashamed now..cause uve written the story in such a way!(its offensive mind u very offensive)...
Sorry i never meant to offend u or anything...but i simply had to submit a review on ur story...
Ur a wonderful writer...think of somethin else to write...Im sure u hve a fertile imagination!...But i hope it does come to this extent...
Happy Writin nd best of luck!
| babee - - balla chapter 7 . 6/2/2005
kewl storeedifferent from wut i wuld usually readupdate soon(i wanna c the "tonight" part)im such a pervanyways update or i'll hunt u down and strangle u 2 death! muahahahaha fear me pathertic humans! (jks)
| Sacred-Phoenix-Nephthys chapter 7 . 6/2/2005
OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG...U MUST update now...this is really good, oh u gotta update, i wanna no wot happens next. Please update soon. This is awesome _
| Sacred-Phoenix-Nephthys chapter 6 . 6/2/2005
Wow...different, this is really good, and i am wondering wot will happen now. I love this. It is great. Onto the next chapter...
| Sacred-Phoenix-Nephthys chapter 5 . 6/2/2005
Hehe...Melissa reminds me of a few people i know. This is good, i can see it in my mind...wait that could be a bad thing...oh well, great chapter, u r a great writer.
| Sacred-Phoenix-Nephthys chapter 3 . 6/2/2005
Short, but really good. Shall read more now. Keep it up _
| Sacred-Phoenix-Nephthys chapter 2 . 5/31/2005
I am liking this...incense...hehe...you're a good author and i can't wait 2 read more...keep up the work...
| Sacred-Phoenix-Nephthys chapter 1 . 5/31/2005
Good opening chapter, ur use of words is well done. I can't wait to read more.R&R mi stuff and i'll do the same.
| Ruby-Wonder chapter 7 . 5/28/2005
OH MY GOD! UPDATE! NOW!
| eeyore-iman chapter 7 . 5/18/2005
hey that was both werid and cool please submit soon
| StarryEyedAmie chapter 7 . 5/14/2005
I realy like this please update!
| Moop1 chapter 7 . 4/5/2005
wow lol you must be gud you managed to glue me to the story in the first chapter *cheers* that doesn't happen often lol i like your story you kind of expect to find it grose but you get glued to it. Your characters are well developed although i would like to know why Liz and Brian suddenly had a change of heart. You better write more or i will just cry coz that cliffhanger is soo bad lolbex x
| AmyBabe chapter 7 . 4/4/2005
Wow, very confusing for them. That would feel so weird. Well written. AmyBabe
| ItalianQT chapter 7 . 2/11/2005
Uh oh! Brian and Liz are gonna get themselves in trouble! Update soon! : )