This is such an incredible story! I really liked the alternating perspectives between the two main protagonists and what i find so amazing about this story is that it gives such a good representation of love, friendship, adulthood, and so much more! I feel that i have learnt so many things from the respective journeys of the two main characters of this story; it seems as if i have matured along with the characters and in fact, im pretty sure i have. To be able to make me feel like this can only reflect on the quality of your writing and i can definitely aay that this story was outstanding. I feel like i've lost a good friend after reading the final chapter haha

Anyway i definitely enjoyed it. Thanks!

Yo! So I read your story over the summer, I had no net [saved it on a usb] and I thought you might like a review, though it's mostly commentary. Here it is!

Chapter 8, Lovesick: Wow! You know alot of languages? :P
Chapter 22, Intact: The ending of this chapter.. Ouch. Feel bad for Heidi.
Chapter 30, TrainWrecks: In reply to your question, I like Mic's story slightly better. :P They're both good, but I just feel the conflict is worse [better] on her side. And her history is really interesting too.
Chapter 33, Distractions: I don't get the point of Tory not being happy with Mic. :d
Chapter 35, Lessons: I like Alice! :O Why must you be evil relationship killer?! I'm actually kinda interested in the original story - curious to see what's different.
Chapter 38, Forever: Quote: "I was disappointed she turned down the job because some part of me was ready for her to leave." Wow. Does that mean they're both gunna end up single? :S
Chapter 40, Unprecedented: I think it's the perfect ending. I don't know how to explain it, so all I'm going to say is Thank you for writing this, I enjoyed reading it and learned so many new things. You know, I think Kat's my fave character. :D Thanks again!

Great story. The interwoven and contrasting story lines of Mic and Tory really gives it an unique perspective on their respective situations. I also really liked the connections between the flashbacks and the present, and how smoothly you've transitioned between them. This is easily one of the best stories I've read on FicPress, with a tight plot that kept me reading on at 2AM.

Although there are some minor grammar errors and missing words, they're forgivable and don't distract from the story too much. However, I thought some scenes could've been shortened, like the parts where some very minor characters (who only show up once or twice in the entire story) are introduced and then each are provided with a short description with how they have came to know the main characters. They're not very important and often their relationships to the protagonist don't contribute to the plot or character building. Maybe try a generalized description for the group of minor characters that are just sitting with the protagonist. Also, I realize it might be due to my lack of knowledge on light designing, but sometimes the technical talk gets overwhelming, and perhaps could've been lightly brushed upon instead.

This is awesome and I thank for finishing this story, I was afraid to click on the link many months ago when I saw how long it had been published, and had not come to an end yet. When I recently found that it was completed, I blasted through the story in two nights. It was well worth my time. I learned much from the tips of wisdom in Dr. Gordon's talks and laughed at some of the well-placed witty jokes. Congratulations on finishing this story, you should be very proud.

Cheers,

TheGuitarBeaver

I think it's been years since I've read something as beautiful as this story. I started it earlier today..it's now two in the morning and I can't put it down.

Thankyou.

Okay so I waited till the end to review which now that I think of it wasn't really the best choice. Oh well. Really good story. I quite like the first person and the switching back and forth between Tory and Mic. I don't think you should change it to second person in another draft. Making Tory second person would clearly delineate her as less important than Mic and I like the way they are close to equals. I think the two stories woven together make it more compelling than either would be alone.

One nitpicky problem from a recent chapter - chemistry labs are usually 3-4 hours long so there's not a good chance of one ending before 10 am...also one doesn't usually sit in them so there'd be no pushing in of chairs. You could easily fix this by just saying it was a chemistry class, though, again most large college classes take place in lecture halls so no pushing in of chairs there either.

Also, while your grammar is generally awesome, there's one error you repeated a lot and that's the use of "I" when it should be "me." This is particularly obvious when it's possessive and you end up writing something like "Laura and I's..." You'd never say "I's" when alone, you'd say "my" so don't say it just because there's another person involved. But I also saw it a couple times when it was just "I" and should have been "me." So check that over since you are planning on revising. And clearly writing more. Which you totally should do because this was great.

I truly enjoyed this story, along with the alternating perspectives and different story lines. The emotions were real and raw. You also write very well, some of the best I've read on here.

Also, as a Massachusetts native, it made me smile every time I recognized a name or place. I'm curious, what's Ashton based on?

gunned this story honey

totes amazed me ;)

Amazing ending. And Laura's quips remain to be some of the best I have seen. :P I am looking forward to future stories!

XLil

Wow, thanks for an amazing story! I will miss eagerly waiting for your updates, but I just wanted to say that this has been one of my favorite stories, and thanks for the journey! :) hope to hear more from you soon!

The last review it was me, i forgot to login -_-u

at first I was one of those "silent people" _u , but i have an excuse becouse I'm from spain and my english is bad enough to feel me uncomfortable with possible mistakes in my words, so, if it wasn't for that, maybe i could rant a little more about your stories : D Thx for your words and for the chapter by the way.

The friendship between Tory and Doc will come back! I'm glad

I'm sad T_T the end of this chapter is really sad,...Aubrey...snif..., i like Laura too but this is unavoidably sad, thx for the update!

Wow That was intense, there has been a lot of feelings surrounding in this chapter, poor Tory T_T I like this character a lot! Thx for the update! Keep Writing *_*

lol. Your own story hasn't been published yet and you already have some fanfiction... ;)

TEAM LAURA. Get yo ass away from Aubrey, Mic!

Loved the who Jacob/Mic thing: SO CUTE. And Mic's baby girl! d'aw

Now, quick serious grammatical note: please let me just grammatically proof your story before another draft because you use 'I' when the accusative or genitive case should be used and it stabs me a little inside.

Loving it and can't wait for the end!

XLil

PLEASE tell me what secrets I am meant to be seeing in the top part. Other than of course that Mic's job will tear them apart and MIC AND LAURA will live happily ever after?

:P

Bunker still not safe enough. I will attack when the times does come.

Its coming ever closer.

:D

XLil