Reviews for Simon Says
Me my self and I chapter 1 . 10/6/2003
i realy like this poem. I like the part about being a mocking bird, verry original. The bit about going to get a clue is good too.
Nick Keller chapter 1 . 8/21/2003
Legless-Catapillar chapter 1 . 7/31/2003
I like this one of yours, probably my favourite or maybe "Remember". I agree with Swiftpaw about the grammar thing and in some of your poems the rhyming seems a little forced. However, enough of critism - I love the idea of Simon Says, very original "Go get a life", hehe very good!
Namir Swiftpaw chapter 1 . 7/28/2003
Just a little things wrong here with the grammar. All those commas in the middle of each line in the first and third stanzas aren't really necessary...well, some of them are, but some of them are not.

"You repeat the words, you hear them say.

Youre like a sheep, thats lost its herd,"

Plus, you don't seem to use apostrophes at all. *shrugs* Just me, though. I am big on grammar and the like. :P

This was a good poem otherwise, though. I really like the lines "You're like a sheep that lost it's heard - you're like a fucking mockingbird." Awesome.

Keep writing.

~Namir Swiftpaw