Reviews for guilt ridden
aleppine chapter 1 . 10/8/2003
There seems to be a few odd things going on with your punctuation here ... possibly a formatting problem? I really like the structure. In some parts of this, the sentences seem to flow into eachother, and I think it works very well - the 'and' thrown in repeatedly does that - which makes the poem seem slightly gushing. I enjoyed that effect. Some good ideas squeezed into this ... and I say 'squeezed' because the mood of it feels like that to me, a bit - as though the poem wasn't enough to hold the emotions in it, and so the words are constricted. Again, nice effect achieved here.
Nick Keller chapter 1 . 8/13/2003
i really like the angst that you have in your writing. and this particular piece is quite fine if you ask me.
JTierra1988 chapter 1 . 8/3/2003
I think something important you left out is you/he feels so guilty he can't forgive himself. if he can he would be freed but he can't let himself.. I can really understand this. _ JMBunny
Incubabe chapter 1 . 8/3/2003
This is really good. It's so intense and dark - I love it!