This is great! I love this! I don't care if there is any gramar mistakes, you have a great talent for writing. You don't make it like life is fine all the time. You make it how life really is. Awesome, keep writing!

Man, I've read a couple of these stories posted on this site and I've only read chapter one and it roxs!

Two suggestions - seperate your dialogue on seperate lines, so that we know who's talking and it doesn't get jumbled. Secondly, seperate your paragraphs into smaller chunks and double space in between them. It makes it a lot easier to read when there's short segments. Great story, and thanks for adding me to your favorites

wow! i really like it! keep writing more...i wanna read more...

hey i really like this story keep writing please.

Great story!

Great start! I can't wait to read more. )

Not bad. I wouldn't mind reading more of this...

I loved it! Good start