Still pretty good. But a story can't depend on drama alone. you need more conflict in this. you know that other link i sent you? there's a conflict one somewhere there too. Conflict is good. I know you already have lots between the charaacters, but i think you should have something BIGGER, ya know?

anyways, this is going rele good. good luck!

The Green Crow

OOH ryan's a playa... LMAO

Hey this is pretty good! I really like the premise, just one thing though: characters are more then one adjective. They're gonna seem really really flat if you can do that, just apply one adjective to them. Think of ppl you know: can you do label them as neatly as you labels these people?

Read through that article, it shouldnt take long and itll help you alot.

Anyways, thanks alot for writing this, its really great and its really entertaining so far.

The Green Crow

I would have smacked him right back! Aughh! Cna't they get along? Update soon!

I meant Ryan in my last review, but if another one of them is a decent cook, I'll marry that one!

Can I marry him? He can cook! My cooking skills are zero.

I like it. This chapter shows thar she's not just a depressed thing. She's real person, with feelings, a little more sensitive than others, but yeah,

I would be a hermit if I had to be there for even five minutes. I'd probably like Bella or Owen best.

The story is so great! I love how each character has it's own detailed personality!

I guess I love all the characters... I can't really decide which one the most, though xD... probably Trent.

Your story is really awesome, the idea is pretty good! Keep it up!

hey! why'd you stp writing? This story is hilarious. that's a compliment. some stories that say they are hilarious aren't as funny as yours! And i'm seriuos! haha. well pease write more!

Sapphire and Trent are the two i like best both have some realy hard-to-deal-with problems so i feel for them, but Owen is pretty cool too, i dont like the gotta-be-the-happy-one thing..meh..

Ryan's funny, but ges a bit of a perv. and the other 2 chicas, i dont like em, dont ask coz i dunno i just dont.

Update Soon.

Jorja : )

Well, I don't think it's starting to get majorly sucky at all. I like it. And I really like Owen. Though, I'm kind of dissapointed that Ryan's a man whore. lol. I like Bella the best out of the girls, becuase I think I can identify most easily with her. This reminds me of the Breakfast Club. I love that movie to pieces.

I'm starting to like Trent a lot. He's so ... interesting. I love the end of this chapter. "God, I hate unison." That was hilarious.

Wow. Definitely looking forward to reading this. I love it already. And I have to admit, I get addicted to reality tv, like the Real World, so easily. So, I think this story will be a good one.

Interesting so far... humorous... flow, original...