Reviews for Pain
Turquoisetears chapter 1 . 8/13/2003
Okay, I absolutely love this one. It’s great. However…eighth line down, “A smile creeps though”…shouldn’t that be “through”? I especially like the way you did the first few lines. “One for the grief/Two for the pain”—that’s really catchy. The ending line though…it doesn’t sound quite right. It’s kind of …off. But overall, fantastic. It hits really deep...Great job. _