Reviews for Sparrows |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I love Richard, and Coby and Gabriel are funny. |
![]() ![]() It was friggin hilarious, I was laughing through the whole story. If u stop i'll kill u, but if i kill u then who will finsh it? See? its a lose lose situtation. |
![]() ![]() Excellent story. It's REALLY keeping me interested. I've never had a big family, just an older sister and two older brothers, so I'm interested in what this is about. I'm looking forward to seeing where you will go with improving the relationship between Devin and Richard. It's really fun to see interactions between the siblings. One thing I don't like, is the swearing, though... if you have to swear, please keep it to a minimum. Swearing isn't really a flattering thing for characters, because it kind of just makes them sound stupid. If you're intellegent, you'll think of something else to say besides a cuss word. Anyways, I'm really enjoying the story; it's engaging and well-written. Please continue ASAP! |
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![]() ![]() gah! i'm convinced that i AM gabe. we both love movies and the name gabe and i want to work at blockbuster so bad! i go in and arrange hte videos in alphabetical ordre because people mess them up. you have to be oldre to wokr there, so i ask if they'd hire me just to arrange the movies and they say no. i will continue to do it for free. oh, back to the story. i like it. a lot. there should be more gabe. yeah. WRITE MORE I LOVE YOU! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So he does like her? I thought so! But then there is Tatum, and oh lord, she IS going to turn into another Kit isn't she? Anyways, I can't wait for the next chapter! (Hehehehe...ransom notes.) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice chapter! 10/10 |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like this story! i get a little confused with all the siblings, but i just have to keep looking at the first chapter lol. i like how you write from the first person of a guy. that's hard to do sometimes. i have to say that Gabe is my favorite because he reminds me a lot of me! hahaha. plus his name rocks hard. anyway, i can't wait to find out what happens with richard/talia/tatum. i love the name Tatum! tatum o neill bad news bears yeah! there's this girl at the theatre i work at who looks like Tatum O'Neill and Jodie Foster fused together. it's cool. allright this is long and off topic. i think you already know how talented i think you are, so just remind yourself hahahaha. i love you man, you ROCK! |
![]() ![]() Hey Kate!This is REALLY good! But I'm a little confused with ALL of those kids! lol I'm heading to the next chatper :)Your shameless pluggin worked! haha*~*Britt*~* |
![]() ![]() ![]() What kind of girl IS Talia to him? When he mentioned her: "perfect, make-up less complexion, startling blue eyes and carelessly wavy blond hair." Is it safe to believe he really likes her? She's not going to end of being another Kit is she? Or good God, another Jordan? I don't think I like their father much, drunk at nine-thirty at night. Somebody enroll him in AA. Anyways, keep writing and PLEASE update soon! (By the way, I'm going to be writing a story that I guess I got inspiration of your from-who knew first person could be so great? It has twenty people living under the same roof. A spoiled and rich Grandma. And an inheritance. Right now I'm working on how to write it, but it's a lot of fun.) And, and by the way, Richard is the best! It's not often you can relate with a guy-about life and everything. Can't wait for your next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Write more! Write more! I love Richard by the way, it was cool to go from a boy's point of view this time. And he doesn't sound like most of the hormonally charged nud brains I know around here. And the sibiling rivalry rocks! I only have one brother-yes I know, it's pretty petty next to seven and five brothers and sisters-who is pratically my best friend half the time, and the rest of the time he acts like the spawn of Satan. This family sounds great too, not exactly like the Sways, but it is great. I can't wait until you get another chapter up! And as long as our tempermental internet doesn't freeze up on us again, I will be here, reading! So, keep writing and update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you for telling me that this was up! It's great-I mean, it's sad AND funny, and basically chaotic. Kinda like my family durning Christmas. I swear, I was drinking Sprite when Richard was having his phone conversation-my lord I thought I would die! I knew it was funny and everything, but you also said it was going to be sad, so I thought it was safe to drink. Cue in the Jaws music: Just when you thought it was safe to sip the water. (Well, Sprite's a little like water-at least this is, there is no fizz) Where was I? Oh yeah, it was choke city! This story is wonderfully written, and it is pretty sad. To have your Mom think you were a mistake. To have an absent Dad. To have SIX brothers and sisters. Anyways, I wanted to tell you I LOVE it! And now I'm going to go read the second chapter-and don't be surprised if you get another review!_ |