Pretty good stuff. The only problem I see is a tendency to misuse words-for example, you said "strutted" when you meant "strode," and "mingled" when you meant "lingered."

Not done yet!

Neat,battles, gotta love 'em. Your so good, I like your style. Too bad mine sucks. Keep writing!

I'm your only reviewer,sniff, that's so sad your really good. Well then I'll just have to keep reveiwing then huh?

Quite interesting, nice graphic details

maybe I could learn something from you