This is so good! The inevitable finally arrives. Roux seems such a wild animal here. So sorry for Lianna. I like Lianna's thought of how Roux could have become her suitor had circumstances been different. You better continue on providing details. You've already started so why stop now? Please update.

I like it. please update

Amazing story! How could you stop at this point? Lianna has so much life in her and Roux looks very strong and demanding. No clothes for Lianna! This would only get more exciting. Please update.

NO! DAMN CLIFFHANGERS! okay I am fine now.

On a lighter note:

Great chapter! I really enjoyed reading it and please update really really soon.

OO, he's soo evil! I LOVE IT! Seriously, so fantastic, they way you write is captivating, and you just rock, the world. And thank you for your reviews, your advic, has hitched onto my writing and has helped a lot. Keep up the work, I love itt! I can't wait to see what happenes! It would rock is she knocked him out! :D

I wonder how this will play out; she's not likely willing to give herself to him, and she'll probably try something that won't make Roux very happy.

Hey! this is fantastic! You must continue! Ohh, i wonder whats gunna happen next!

~* viv *~

OMG! -again- Wow, this is so good, seriously, I love sories like these. I hope ou continue, because I love it! such a greast story, and it has that suspense that I like. E, can't wait!

OMG! I loev this, this is exactly what i've been looking for to read! I have some stories close to this, and wow, I love reading stories like this! -goes on to read next chapter-

I really like this story so far. update..update..update please _

Great start...gasp...language...lol j/k

on a serious note keep writing i like it a lot

this is a good story so far im very interested in seeing where it will lead please update as soon as possible

this is a good story so far im very interested in seeing where it will lead please update as soon as possible

Ok. Don't take this as a flame, but rather constructive criticism. I think the story has potential-if I didn't, I wouldn't be reviewing.

You have a lot of sentence problems here. The first paragraph is virtually *all* subject-verb sentences, i.e.: "Roux rode..." "It's tail..." "It's black coat..." "It's fiery golden eyes..."

These are ok in general, but you should try and variate the sentence structure at least a little to make it more interesting. All the "he did this" "it looked like that" stuff in a row makes for rather stilted and boring reading. Not to mention the fact that it's "its" not "it's" when you're using the possessive. You made that particular mistake at least three times in a row, so I'm guessing you just didn't know the rule. Well, now you do. Oh, and every sentence has to have a verb, or it isn't a sentence. If you run a grammar check (f7 in windows, I think) or get a beta, he/she/it will tell you this. For example, it's incorrect to say:"It's fiery golden eyes glowing with an old flame which Roux and Roux alone had long since tamed."

This needs a helping verb, like 'were,' before glowing. Or you could combine it with the previous sentence with a comma.

Another example:

"It's interior gutted, leaving just the frame."

Again the "its" thing, and you need a verb. If variety is the spice of a story, then grammar is the meat that you put it on. You're lacking on both. Edit, edit, edit.

Nice update! I'm going to keep checking for more!