Reviews for Wonderboy |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my gosh! That was so beautiful.. It really told alot. I hope he recovers soon... On another note, sounds like he was a cool guy. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG I'm glad he's ok...*wipes tears* jeez this really got to me...I cannot imagine that depth of pain...I think I would die...oh god...great job... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Heart-breakingly real. I think you can take out "They won't get the rest of us" to "He never lets them fall". It doesn't matter HOW he died, but THAT he died. If he died any other way, would you feel any more or less pain? No. The way isn't important, only that it happened, so take out the stuff about the car accident. And take out "Not Shawn we say" to "He will forever be our wonderboy". We've already figured out that he was this magical person that was so full of life. And you should end it with "Not Shawn, we say/Not our wonderboy." You don't need to actually say your thoughts and emotions because you've already done it by describing Shawn and by repeating "Not Shawn" throughout the whole poem. In this poem, subtelty works best. Very nice poem. |
![]() ![]() I'm sorry about what happened to him, I just hope he survives and doesn't have many difficulies afterward. It was written beutifully and depressingly, which, I know it's pathetic, but I always love sad/bittersweet stories/poems. Would this be considered bittersweet? I don't know, anyway, again, it was great and I hope he gets better soon! |