Reviews for jealousy
handle187 chapter 1 . 9/17/2003
I didn't like it. Sounded too generic.
ittybittytreefrog chapter 1 . 9/10/2003
Sad. It's tragic how jealousy ruins friendship, isn't it? *sigh* I know it's true though. Nice poem.
swirlygirl chapter 1 . 9/7/2003
nice word usage great poem
Psycho-kyugurl chapter 1 . 8/28/2003
I love tanka, and reading this nevertheless enjoying. Keep on writing!
Keep it 100 chapter 1 . 8/23/2003
I love this. It is sad, but it describes jealousy so well. Also, great imagery as usual.

~Heart of the Sword
willowzbitch chapter 1 . 8/18/2003
shredmyties chapter 1 . 8/18/2003
there are rarely tankas, im glad you gave the effort to make one, and a deeply moving one as well.

my comment? it was beautiful and had managed to capture me by the second line. you have a way with words ) i am DEEPLY impressed, do continue on writing~
JaphyRider chapter 1 . 8/18/2003
Beautifully depressing. I can tell from your poetry that you are a wise person.:)

I can't find anything to critique. I love it.
Carter Tachikawa chapter 1 . 8/18/2003
A very nice tanka. You've described jealousy rather well and used some lovely lines. Anyway, keep writing.

Shelila chapter 1 . 8/17/2003
Very sad... you wrote it well, I never knew haikus could be like that... I always thought they could only be three lines! But this is still a haiku cause it still follows the pattern. Keep writing!

Can you R/R some of my stuff if you have time?