Love it!:D

Great job! I liked it a lot!

you're one of those authors who probably has no idea what meter is, but writes in it naturally (Here you use Trochaic Trimeter and Iambic Tetrameter). This is great, but it would be better if you standardized to one of these (probably Iambic Tetrameter, its more natural sounding).

"lure in him"-this doesn't make sense to me, 'rouse in him' maybe or 'lures him to', "lures in him" just doesn't work.

If poems had plots, this one's would confuse me to no end. What are you talking about? About how time is immovable? How ghost sightings change people? How music causes hallucinations? I'm just really turned around by this whole experience.

zac

please review this, i want to know what you think!