Wow...this is a great short story! I am just in awe! The descriptions were awesome and the story so sad and beautiful. And it ended on a clear note. Short and concise, it's a true short story. _

GAH! That's...just...crepy...O_O

Whoa! That was awesome. I'm a huge fan of short stories and Kurt Vonnegut is one of my favorite authors. Your writing style and theme reminds me of some of his work. Excellent! Write more please. I did say please. lol

That was pretty powerful. How does volleyball give you an idea like this? Very good.