Reviews for Concentration
glitterjewele chapter 1 . 8/27/2003
excellent. right off the bat i liked the format ~ starting each stanza with 'concentrate' made a huge impression. i liked how the stanzas were short and the lines compact ~ they fit the idea of the poem very well. my favorite lines from this were: "a boiling pit of constant movement," "winking out and in these lights," and "held gently so as not to kill." a very solid piece of poetry. good work.
Kari-demon chapter 1 . 8/25/2003
i can relate to that... darn plotbunnies