|Reviews for Unexpected|
| Donnatella chapter 1 . 10/20/2004
Amazing. Fantastic. And I totally take back what I said about you needing to write more.
| Ahrar Nighthammer chapter 1 . 12/9/2003
*Mouth hangs open*
*Finds nothing to say*
That is fantastic.
That is awesome, though.
| Loriena chapter 1 . 8/30/2003
Very nice for a short story, especially for one written in first-person.
I'm sure you wouldn't mind a little constructive criticism- though you generally wrote in present tense ("like now, I'm gather herbs"), you switched to past tense a few times ("I watched its delicate hooves raising themselves and moving on the dry leaves closer.") when describing "your" actions. Otherwise, it was really well done.
By the way, though "unicorn" starts with a vowel, it's not preceded by "an," like it was written in your summary. It would be "a unicorn." (U, in this instance, sounds more like the Japanese mora "yu" than simply "u")
Despite that, good job ; )
| All Mighty Terrestrial chapter 1 . 8/28/2003
Out of death comes life. Sad and interesting all at the same time. Good job.
| Shadowstorm chapter 1 . 8/28/2003
wow. good story, a little on the depressing side, but i'm one to talk... lol
| child-dragon chapter 1 . 8/27/2003
*tiny voice* Ek. That was definately unexpected. Abrubt, frightening, and definately different. I like it!