Reviews for False Facades
guest chapter 6 . 7/18/2014
DandyAndy chapter 30 . 7/11/2014
I loved this story! I read it from beginning to end without stopping, I couldn't tear my eyes from my computer screen. The only criticism that I would offer is that sometimes the dialogue gets a bit confusing, with so many characters having one conversation at the same time. That being said, I loved how every character was so uniquely developed and raw. I really felt like I got to know these characters you've created! A job very well done.
ariawillows chapter 30 . 7/7/2014
Uhhhhh, never mind. I realized you have a revised version, and probably address this. But if you ever are looking to revise it again, I'd definitely have constructive suggestions ! And I really admire your light-hearted, upbeat style.
ariawillows chapter 14 . 7/7/2014
Serious suggestion here, if you plan to revise this story, or maybe even publish it.

I like how light-hearted it is. At times that really works, and I wouldn't lose that vibe. But I think sometimes you give the tension away a little too easily. For example, it's never made very clear what the consequences for Sam would be if she was found to be masquerading as a girl at this all-boys school. Vincent was talking about running the new kid out of school in the beginning... That went away pretty quickly. I was expecting him to be more reluctant about befriending his roommate. Vincent & Tristan's relationship also really isn't as cutthroat/bad as people keep hinting at in the story. Everyone is super nice to Sam, which is nice and all, but doesn't make for a story with spark, and you would think that rich private school dudes would be a little less simplistic/cheerful/welcoming. Even this new conflict of potentially seeing her uncle is eased relatively easily.

Just my two cents.
Sansa chapter 30 . 7/7/2014
I have never, ever been so absolutely and utterly captivated with a story quite like this before. The characterisation of every character was impeccable - believable and raw. I felt like I was in another world reading this, it was so beautifully written that I am in awe.
Grespitchied chapter 30 . 7/6/2014
I LOVE THIS STORY! It's soooooo funny! I love Sa,
M! Her character is so adorable! Specially in the beginning! And will is just the cherry on top! There are so many memorable scenes but on of my favorites would be the motel scene where she pushes Vincent off the bed! And everytime Will hits on someone it's just toooooooo much! I couldn't stop laughing! Goshhhhh!
Guest chapter 18 . 6/23/2014
It is good, though I think you owe a great debt to Hana Kimi for it. I would have liked to have seen you give that work some credit.

You've got a bit of moxie getting upset at people plagiarizing your work, given that you have clearly been 'inspired' by others'. Not that I defend the plagiarists, of course. But I can kind of understand that they would fail to credit you just as easily as you have failed to credit your source.
Trillpuv chapter 30 . 6/21/2014
ajashire1 chapter 30 . 6/19/2014
Read it in one in a half days and loved it. Thank you for reposting this story, it sucks how many have been lost to plagiarism... so thanks!
Guest chapter 1 . 6/18/2014
Hi, I don't know if you'll ever read this review. But firstly, your story is amazing. Which you obviously already know. But I'm mainly writing this to warn you. There's someone selling your book on Amazon.
Samantha chapter 30 . 6/17/2014
This was really good. First time reading it. One whole day I couldn't tear my eyes away. Okay, too much computer time for me now so, I have to do something active. Toodles and I will check to see if you have any other stories.
whackedout101 chapter 2 . 6/16/2014
As I love writing myself. . . but haven't updated in a while, I thought I'd try and give a little more of my own constructive criticism.

I'm someone who always loves back stories to things and I was just wondering why the heck Sam is even going to this school and not some other school. I mean, you definitely gave some background information in regards to her parents and her brother but that's it. . . and this could be one of those stories that you don't explain until later.

Other than that, I really am enjoying this story. It's really silly and kind of upbeat. I look forward to continue to read this story and see what other mishaps Sam gets herself into.
whackedout101 chapter 1 . 6/16/2014
I look forward to reading the rest of this story. . .however I want to comment on your title. I'm sure out of 7000 reviews/comments you probably rarely read all of them but I thought I'd let you know that the title of this story is kind of a double negative. . . or really, it's rather redundant. I say this because the word facade means "a way of behaving or appearing that gives other people a false idea of your true feelings or situation" so the fact that you added false in front of the word 'facade' makes it redundant. However, I'm sure that wasn't your intention and you probably wanted to follow with the alliteration that you had going. . .I just thought I'd let you know.

Also, I would also like to add that the beginning of this story is highly unlikely. A prestigious school like the one that you've made up would probably never let a student in without transcripts from previous schools. Again, you might have put that in for a reason. . . but just for this case, I thought I'd point that out. I love unrealistic things as much as the next person, but for some reason, for books that are fiction but set in a realistic settings, I don't like an unrealistic things to be happening.

Overall, I actually look forward to reading the rest of this fiction. It reminds me of the movie 'She's The Man' but I'll overlook that.
Tiffany Lindley chapter 30 . 6/15/2014
All I can say is I really enjoyed reading False Facades and I will definitely be checking out Through Me.
nizza chapter 1 . 5/20/2014
It was a great story...
I enjoyed both humour and romance
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