|Reviews for Crushed|
| tranCendenZ chapter 1 . 1/11/2004
i didnt even want to read the poem...i'm not trying to be rude or judgemental...but just because someone doesn't like you doesn't mean they are a jerk(he probably was but still)..and i've gotten used to the fact that there are plenty of assholes out there...if he is such a jerk why proclaim a poem about him...just let it go...you are doing him a favor by being so annoyed by it
| nimue webweaver chapter 1 . 9/21/2003
okay this poem was amazing. very beautiful, full of passion. good job, but i have one small sugestion.
"I think for myself, dress how I please
I’m not desperate anymore
I can live with much more ease
My life’s not such a bore"
i sugest you swich the lines around, so the I'm not desperate anymore line is first, and then the first line is second. im probably confusing anyone who reads this. lol. but the only reason i am saying this is because the third line in this stanza seems like such an ending line, it makes you mind want to go to hte next stanza, so that the last line sounds off.
just a sugestion, no offense meant or anything. this is a great poem
could you r/r some of mine please? thanks
| tommygirl6626 chapter 1 . 9/9/2003
OMG! that has to be the best poemI have eva read, but that, no offence, limits it to about 1 out of 25.
| Ares1020 chapter 1 . 9/6/2003
someone is angry. Im glad im not that kid. Wait a second, he has a girl on each arm? I wish i were that kid. Im just kidding, i like it. Okay have fun keep writing bye
| dysgruntalphemale chapter 1 . 9/6/2003
That was excellent. Maybe I should learn to move on too...But your poem is great!
I understand, too.
| Trinity of Dreams chapter 1 . 9/5/2003
| unknownbeauty2003 chapter 1 . 9/5/2003
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 9/5/2003
wow wow wow... i love this poem i hate love & this poem rocks a lot its beautiful i love it! i missed your work!