| Reviews for Vale Of Truth |
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   Endless Nightmares chapter 24 . 3/5/2004 Hmm- Maybe not 100, but close to it. Nicely done! |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 23 . 3/5/2004 Hello- Charisma got emotional, how sad. Oh well, some characters can't seem to let their emotions alone. But overall, great job! Whispers In Silence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 22 . 3/5/2004 Hmm- "Screaming he brought it from her." It should be read like, " Screaming, he brought it from her." You have a comma problem just like me, and it sucks. But you have made some nice descriptions, which actually helped this chapter from being a flop. Nicely done! Whispers In SIlence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 21 . 3/5/2004 Hello- I hate act like Simon now, but I did not like this sentence: "Flicking in the hazy fog above her and rain and lightning, read one white sign." First of all, it starts out nice, but it just doesn't seem clear. I think this sounds better. " Droplets of rain began to fall, as she read the white sign, which was very sloppily written." or "As rain began to fall steadily, a heavy fog formed surrounding her, causing her to squint at the white sign." Hopefully, those will help you better. All in all, I liked the chapter, just thought I'd help you with it. WHispers In Silence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 20 . 3/5/2004 Hello- Commas don't seem to be your best friend. I would advise you to look up on how to use commas correctly. I mean you have good comma usuage, but some places need them. All in all, nicely done! WHispers In Silence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 19 . 3/5/2004 Hmm- Great chapter, Ham. |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 18 . 3/5/2004 Heh- I really like your narration paragraphs, because thats where your best descriptions are. Short chapter, but very enjoying. WHispers In Silence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 17 . 3/5/2004 Geez- Crazy chapter. Nice horror build up. Very nice. Enjoyed it! Whispers In Silence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 16 . 3/5/2004 Hello- Some commas should have been placed around in the chapter. One should placed after the thrid word of the 2nd to last paragraph. All in all, great job. Saw some blood, but not the splatterpunk. Maybe next chapter, who knows? Whispers In Silence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 15 . 3/5/2004 Hmm.. Interesting... Very nice. |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 14 . 3/5/2004 Hello- I am going for the 100th review hopefully. Very good. |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 13 . 3/5/2004 Hello- Well, very nice chapter. Some places of suspence, and especially at the end. Nice job! WHispers In Silence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 12 . 3/5/2004 To tell you the truth- change the rating of this story, dude, heh. But great chapter though. WHispers In Silence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 11 . 3/5/2004 Fools gold makes me laugh, j/k, it sounds literally like the person is a fool for finding the gold thats fake. I've never found fools golds, and I never will. Interesting chapter, keep it up. Whispers In Silence |
| Endless Nightmares chapter 10 . 3/5/2004 Hmm- Very nice, very good. Great descriptions of things. Very good improvement from your last chapter. |